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kborsden
10-05-2015, 01:51 AM
The sedoka is an unrhymed poem made up of two three-line katauta structured as 5-7-7. Commonly it will address the same subject from differing perspectives or feature a volta-esque redressing of the core subject, with the break between each katauta.

A Katauta itself is often considered an incomplete poem, or seen as an element of something greater as opposed to a finished, refined work. Throughout ancient Japan, many poets would add to or author responses to existing katauta in order to create longer collaborative poetry. Such a poem is referred to as a Mondo: a series of katauta by various poets.

As a new poetry game, I wanted to put forward the idea of a Mondo, but with consideration of a continuing or fluid relationship between the katuata as with the sedoka. I feel we can do this as follows:

Method


first post: a single katauta
following post: a katauta in response, volta/turn or peripity, continuation (or using an idea/theme/reference from preceding post
next post: as previous
etcetera


Rules


no restriction on theme (whether following or diverging)
can rhyme if you like
must be 5-7-7
should be comprised of a single sentence, but no more than 2 if not
quote preceding katauta for ease of reference


Does that make sense? Basically, I'd like to see how long it can go for and how it evolves, morphs, meanders and snakes. The idea is to be as tight, or as fluid (liberal) in the relationship as you fancy, only linking your post to the preceding one (don't worry about the whole). This way, the result will be a tapestry of meta-sedoka as opposed to some forced extended epic. If you're stuck for ideas, you could always lean on device such as refrain (i.e. borrow a line from the previous post) or anaphora (i.e. repeating a word or words to start a line), or perhaps syllabic mirroring and parallelisms -- or even elaborate on, or strengthen an existing concept or metaphor.

Great. So let's get started :)

See section below for the starting Katauta.

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A city skyline
yawns before me as morning
stirs the urbanite dreamer
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CDSinex
10-05-2015, 02:46 AM
A city skyline
yawns before me as morning
stirs the urbanite dreamer
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I hope this is what you have in mind. :D

Squeaking trash truck brakesó
only my alarm clock sleeps
in silence, its task complete.

cellajam
10-05-2015, 03:00 AM
CD wrote:


Squeaking trash truck brakesó
only my alarm clock sleeps
in silence, its task complete.

I wake to silence
broken only by the beat
of a gray heron's wingspan

kborsden
10-05-2015, 11:41 AM
I wake to silence
broken only by the beat
of a gray heron's wingspan

shaded underneath
the summer's softened pallet
seemed to shine, effervescent

kborsden
10-06-2015, 01:09 AM
to move it along...


shaded underneath
the summer's softened pallet
seemed to shine, effervescent

with every greyed hint
a fresh promise awoken
yet never younger in age

kborsden
10-10-2015, 01:11 AM
weak attempt to keep it alive...



with every greyed hint
a fresh promise awoken
yet never younger in age


The years are youthful
regardless of ancient days
or eternally dead hours

jlmott
10-10-2015, 05:00 AM
weak attempt to keep it alive...



The years are youthful
regardless of ancient days
or eternally dead hours

The dead under foot
reach up with grassy fingers
to touch the sunlight once more

kborsden
10-10-2015, 02:25 PM
The dead under foot
reach up with grassy fingers
to touch the sunlight once more

Maybe if we could,
a simple touch is enough
to invigorate us all

B.D. Eyeslie
10-13-2015, 03:39 PM
Maybe if we could,
a simple touch is enough
to invigorate us all

Early morning frost,
outlines footprints on the lawn
leading down to the lake house.

Filigree
10-13-2015, 05:47 PM
Something like this?

Ripples on water
Intersecting, then inert;
Canny fish ignores the bait.

kborsden
10-13-2015, 07:50 PM
Ripples on water
Intersecting, then inert;
Canny fish ignores the bait.

I wish that I were
so cunning a creature too;
just as cunning, just as you.

B.D. Eyeslie
10-14-2015, 12:44 AM
I wish that I were
so cunning a creature too;
just as cunning, just as you.

A straightforward skill,
for a pittance you can buy
all of my secrets to try.

kborsden
10-14-2015, 01:32 AM
A straightforward skill,
for a pittance you can buy
all of my secrets to try.

Secrets bought or taught
are no longer secrets kept
but precious memories won

jlmott
10-14-2015, 04:21 PM
Secrets bought or taught
are no longer secrets kept
but precious memories won

Tawny maple leaves
remembering the summer
tumble down with hushed laughter.

B.D. Eyeslie
10-14-2015, 06:10 PM
Tawny maple leaves
remembering the summer
tumble down with hushed laughter.

Birds, boxes, dragons
swooping in an offshore breeze;
grassy dunes make soft landings.

CDSinex
10-15-2015, 04:35 AM
Birds, boxes, dragons
swooping in an offshore breeze;
grassy dunes make soft landings.


Akatombo (red dragonfly) is one of the markers of fall in Japan. There are many poems, and a very popular children’s song written about them.

http://farm2.static.flickr.com/1355/1166394582_7aaaa03dfb.jpg


A Red Dragonfly
sits on an autumn crocus—
how little time is left now.

B.D. Eyeslie
10-17-2015, 11:09 PM
The clock's out of gas,
but the story's still coasting.
Oh no! "To be continued?"

Filigree
10-20-2015, 09:20 AM
I really like this format. This one got into my brain in the way home after dark, tonight. Continuing the water theme, sort of?

No jade leaves at night:
Sodium streetlights carve reefs
Of orange and black shadow.

kborsden
10-20-2015, 10:15 AM
No jade leaves at night:
Sodium streetlights carve reefs
Of orange and black shadow.

False fire-light flickers
with every passing car,
the night alive with motion.

B.D. Eyeslie
10-21-2015, 03:33 PM
Neon dragons dance,
winding their way through the streets,
leading me to the noodles.

kborsden
10-21-2015, 08:43 PM
Neon dragons dance,
winding their way through the streets,
leading me to the noodles.

The scent of jasmine,
drifting mildly from far off
realms visited in my dreams...

Filigree
10-22-2015, 09:43 AM
Ah, fragrant miso!
Udon drapes from my spoon like
Kelp and sea-dragon whiskers.

(I know it's off structure... typed on tablet way too late @ night, will fix later.)
There, fixed.

kborsden
10-25-2015, 05:33 PM
Grand mythical beast--
I wonder what you taste like...
Sweetly salted? Umami?

cellajam
10-27-2015, 04:16 AM
Grand mythical beast--
I wonder what you taste like...
Sweetly salted? Umami?

Minuscule plankton
can't even change direction
yet are the strength of giants

cellajam
11-01-2015, 04:33 PM
Minuscule plankton
can't even change direction
yet are the strength of giants

in the maw of fate
peeking between slicing blades
we two-step, even tango

kborsden
11-01-2015, 04:42 PM
in the maw of fate
peeking between slicing blades
we two-step, even tango

A watz before bed,
foxtrot with fluttered eylids—
always a morning moshpit.

cellajam
11-01-2015, 05:04 PM
A waltz before bed,
foxtrot with fluttered eylids—
always a morning moshpit.

volume up to ten
thump obliterating thought
heavy metal vacation

kborsden
11-01-2015, 05:43 PM
volume up to ten
thump obliterating thought
heavy metal vacation

Boys are back in town,
so much changed from when they left;
boys not boys any longer.

kborsden
04-07-2016, 06:00 PM
Boys are back in town,
so much changed from when they left;
boys not boys any longer.

This androgyny:
boys in the girls' room, and girls
in the boys' room... all just fine.