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Mr Ced
09-29-2015, 03:36 AM
Although we have our spouses and some better halves
with out further or due, let me bring to you
My first written STOEM-1 that may make you laugh:

UH - Hello are you here
Ok, now who is that:

What are you speaking of
I know where I'm at:

You know I just saw you
I'm just walking with you looking around:

Looking at that other person
all eyes going up and down:

Now listen calm down
please allow me to assure you:

"Uh Huh" Whatever look again
I'm telling you we're through:

We are her together
Side by side, hand and hand:

Please embrace this solid kiss
It's coming from me
"UNDERSTAND":



Now in many cases it can work that way, when one is calm and willing to listen
If you have to show them, "Yes" take a look at this STOEM
If you rather be with them or miss them:

thehairymob
10-02-2015, 05:26 PM
Not sure of the first line. It seems as if the narrator isn't sure if he is alone. Maybe trimming "are" from the line would make it more assertive and so clearer for the reader from the off. Still I like the feel of two people trying to sort things out. :)