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William Haskins
09-26-2015, 04:40 AM
It's an act
of spiritual violence,
more art than science,
but worthy of precision;
this is no mission of mercy.

It's best to
avoid dead center.
Blades straight to the spine
make for short and unsatisfying work;
suffering should bloom like a bloodflower.

This, however, is not
to say that one should stray
recklessly near the shoulderblades.
Hands should frantically claw in
vain and fail to grasp their torment.

Then, and only when, the
merciless venal mind is sated,
the hatred dulled and faded,
may the coup de grāce be served
with a final thrust and twist.

SWest
09-26-2015, 05:15 AM
Grisly.

Yeah, I like it...

William Haskins
09-26-2015, 07:08 PM
thanks

B.D. Eyeslie
09-28-2015, 03:29 PM
William, you are a freakin' machine--The Word Master by Ronco--the absolute, correct, and definitive piece for any occasion.
I always look forward to seeing your work.

Stew21
09-28-2015, 04:51 PM
Nicely done, William. I like it.

William Haskins
09-28-2015, 09:33 PM
thanks

zarada
09-29-2015, 02:38 AM
ugh. i came in thinking it wasn't about literal backstabbing, rather that you were volunteering advice on literary survival.

but then i couldn't stop reading on. shiver, shiver. particularly at 'bloodflower'. brrr.

Perks
09-29-2015, 02:43 AM
This, however, is not
to say that one should stray
recklessly near the shoulderblades.
Hands should frantically claw in
vain and fail to grasp their torment.



This is the verse that gets me. Knowing the injury is there and trying to escape it and have it out of reach. That's awful.

But this is a tremendous poem.

William Haskins
09-29-2015, 03:36 AM
ugh. i came in thinking it wasn't about literal backstabbing, rather that you were volunteering advice on literary survival.

i'm not well-suited to offering advice on survival, literary or otherwise.


shiver, shiver. particularly at 'bloodflower'. brrr.

it must be said that bloodflowers are quite beautiful.

William Haskins
09-29-2015, 03:38 AM
This is the verse that gets me. Knowing the injury is there and trying to escape it and have it out of reach. That's awful.

But this is a tremendous poem.

it is the most painful part of the ordeal, i reckon. i appreciate your comments, jamie, as always.

Magdalen
09-30-2015, 03:07 AM
Since Cass's been gone, I've gotten in the habit of thinking your poem is meant for me, and me alone, mwha,mwhaa haaa! So, I'll just add, Thanks!

William Haskins
09-30-2015, 03:38 AM
you're welcome.

Sarita
10-01-2015, 05:20 PM
Artful and awful. I'm sure each person reading recollected a time they felt like this. I suppose I should say thanks for the stirring of emotion, the brilliant use of words, delicious precision, and horrifying mental images, but what I really want to say is...

/sarcasm Thanks a lot, Will. /sarcasm

William Haskins
10-01-2015, 06:09 PM
i'm coming to the conclusion that this is one i'm wishing i hadn't written.

Perks
10-01-2015, 06:12 PM
i'm coming to the conclusion that this is one i'm wishing i hadn't written.

Don't say that. It's very effective. And in poetry, I don't think that can ever be a bad thing.

Kylabelle
10-01-2015, 07:26 PM
Don't say that. It's very effective. And in poetry, I don't think that can ever be a bad thing.

Right. Plus which those bloodflowers bring all the girls to the yard.

Sarita
10-01-2015, 10:52 PM
i'm coming to the conclusion that this is one i'm wishing i hadn't written.
No! It's rare that a poem can be perfect and gut-wrenching. You nailed it.

Samsonet
12-19-2018, 10:56 PM
I realize this thread is years old but I was going through the archives and DAMN. I remember this from when I read it in 2015 and it is still beautiful.

William Haskins
12-19-2018, 11:51 PM
thank you for revisiting it, samsonet.

TexasPoet
12-21-2018, 12:29 AM
Extremely well executed....I like that there is a total lack of reason for the act....most backstabbing falls into that genre.

tp :)

QuantumSerendipity
12-30-2018, 05:32 AM
I'm not one for darker themes in poetry as much, but I thought this was phenomenal!

William Haskins
12-30-2018, 06:53 AM
science tells us the universe is 27% dark matter.

thank you for reading and commenting.