maestrowork said:Poet was right. Try to use simple tense (the rain drummed) unless you really mean something is going on when something else happens: "They were playing in the yard when the rain hit."
I am not totally sure what "balance" means but I suspect that it means something like:
When the rain hit, they ran inside the house, locked the door, and shivered in the hallway.
Each verb in that sentence is of the same tense.
Technically, both 1 and 2 are correct. Number 2 is not parallel. In general, I would recommend 1 over 2 in narrative. However, it would not be right to say that 2 should never be used, since to the native speaker of English there are subtle nuances of meaning involved here.1. Rain drummed against the window, and the guitar played quietly.
2. Rain was drumming against the window, and the guitar played quietly.
The following are not "parallel"?
1. I had walked to the lake and took a dip. ("taken" would be the correct)
2. I was attacked by wolves and thought I would die. (It should be "I was attacked by wolves and I thought I would die.)
Medievalist said:Yep; that's it. I'm brain dead, more so than usual, this morning, and can't seem to come up with a decent explanation of parallelis, or parallel construction, though I've been explaining for nigh on twenty years now . . .
So here's a Wikipedia link
I'd like to point out that people keep erroneously describing parallelism as a grammar issue; it isn't. It's a usage and style issue--there's nothing that requires parallel construction; it's a nicety, a courtesy to your readers, and given the way sentence structure works in English an exceedingly seductive rhetorical flourish.
And it's been that way since Beowulf . . .
Rain was drumming against the window and the guitar was playing quietly. Suddenly forgetting where she was, she swerved into the oncoming lane, adding the clang of metal. An instant late as usual, which was why she’d been replaced as cymbalist that morning.poetinahat said:Using the imperfect tense (was drumming and was playing) leads the reader to expect something else to happen while this action continues:
That really sings.Julie Worth said:Rain was drumming against the window and the guitar was playing quietly. Suddenly forgetting where she was, she swerved into the oncoming lane, adding the clang of metal. An instant late as usual, which was why she’d been replaced as cymbalist that morning.