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Hello!
I'm looking for a beta, or someone who wants to novel swap, who will be able to provide critique for my MS. Detailed critique on anything--characterization, plot, structure, you name it, I want to know everything that needs to be fixed with this thing. It has been betaed before and is now in its fourth draft.
Here is some info!
Title: I AM THE JACKAL
Genre: YA Urban Sci Fi
Wordcount: 73,350
Blurb: Bellem is a city known for only two things: a homicide rate staggering enough to scare away even the most hardened police chief, and the Hero Core. The Hero Core is a group of supers who fight the vicious street gangs and criminals even when the police department can’t. And although Seth doesn’t have powers, he wants to be one of them.
Because joining the Core would allow him to find out what they know about who tried to poison his father. Desperate to keep the suspect from coming back to finish the job, Seth devises a plan. When his plan leads him to a serum that gives him powers like super senses and agility, he finally has the chance he’s been waiting for. Becoming the mysterious Jackal, Seth’s instantly on the streets taking names.
But as Seth gets himself deeper in the inner world of the Hero Core, he finds out that their monopoly on the city is more like a stranglehold. Fighting back is not an option if he wants to find the truth about his father’s attempted killer. Seth can’t keep pretending to be their puppet either—not if it means pretending that their job is just a game of cops and robbers.
Because if you sever the puppet strings, you might just fall.
...
Please PM me or reply here if you're interested! I'll novel swap anything YA, and regular scifi and fantasy as well.
I'm looking for a beta, or someone who wants to novel swap, who will be able to provide critique for my MS. Detailed critique on anything--characterization, plot, structure, you name it, I want to know everything that needs to be fixed with this thing. It has been betaed before and is now in its fourth draft.
Here is some info!
Title: I AM THE JACKAL
Genre: YA Urban Sci Fi
Wordcount: 73,350
Blurb: Bellem is a city known for only two things: a homicide rate staggering enough to scare away even the most hardened police chief, and the Hero Core. The Hero Core is a group of supers who fight the vicious street gangs and criminals even when the police department can’t. And although Seth doesn’t have powers, he wants to be one of them.
Because joining the Core would allow him to find out what they know about who tried to poison his father. Desperate to keep the suspect from coming back to finish the job, Seth devises a plan. When his plan leads him to a serum that gives him powers like super senses and agility, he finally has the chance he’s been waiting for. Becoming the mysterious Jackal, Seth’s instantly on the streets taking names.
But as Seth gets himself deeper in the inner world of the Hero Core, he finds out that their monopoly on the city is more like a stranglehold. Fighting back is not an option if he wants to find the truth about his father’s attempted killer. Seth can’t keep pretending to be their puppet either—not if it means pretending that their job is just a game of cops and robbers.
Because if you sever the puppet strings, you might just fall.
...
Please PM me or reply here if you're interested! I'll novel swap anything YA, and regular scifi and fantasy as well.