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C.bronco
06-04-2015, 06:17 AM
Green dots show you're there.
I click on the bs thread.
This place feels like home.

zanzjan
06-04-2015, 08:46 AM
Obliquely ref'renced,
the snark, the joy, the sadness--
I'd fly nowhere else.

Filigree
06-04-2015, 05:57 PM
Fog of denial,
Quicksand, cryptic industries:
How I wrote before.

Maryn
06-04-2015, 11:12 PM
Hell's bells. You expect
Me to compete with all the
Good poets in here?

Maggie Maxwell
06-04-2015, 11:34 PM
Why isn't the poll
A haiku too? And it was
Not started by Vince?

Reziac
06-04-2015, 11:48 PM
Some haiku express
Depths of insight and beauty
But this one does not.

C.bronco
06-05-2015, 05:54 AM
I tried my best, but had technical difficulties.

C.bronco
06-05-2015, 05:56 AM
Maryn is looking like a hot Dali balloon.

poetinahat
06-05-2015, 06:13 AM
there is no root beer
in this A&W
and that frosts my mug

Haggis
06-05-2015, 06:21 AM
I used to rite pomes
But they rhymed and stuff, you know?
Poets hated me

C.bronco
06-05-2015, 06:25 AM
This all makes me happy in my heart. I do like cheese, btw. Especially brie.

C.bronco
06-07-2015, 05:44 AM
I am worried about Orlando's lack of support on the poll, however.

Filigree
06-07-2015, 08:43 PM
He's pretty, but honestly, what's he done lately? :Shrug:

shakeysix
06-07-2015, 09:04 PM
Gouda, Farmer, Brick
Haskins isn't always
a ... heartless critic
--s6

shakeysix
06-07-2015, 09:11 PM
Fresco, Oaxaca
Bronco es mi poeta
mas preferida

shakeysix
06-07-2015, 09:32 PM
To haggis:

Chihuahua perro
Chihuahua tambien queso
¿Cuál te gusta mas?

Translation:
Chihuahua doggies
Chihuahua is also cheese
Which do you please?
s6

shakeysix
06-07-2015, 10:10 PM
Tasty Cheese Cheddar
Aussie cheese is weirder than
Rezi's avatar

shakeysix
06-07-2015, 10:59 PM
Salty, Nutty, Sharp
We'd best take our friend Nymtoc
Sliced right off the block.

Maryn
06-07-2015, 11:03 PM
Maryn is looking like a hot Dali balloon.I stopped reading when I got the gist of "Maryn is looking hot."

Maryn, somewhat balloon shaped

Maryn
06-07-2015, 11:06 PM
Wait, that's the first two lines of a haiku:

Maryn is looking
Like a hot Dali balloon
It can't be denied.

Maryn, poet after all

shakeysix
06-08-2015, 12:29 AM
AND hot deli balloon--No wait! That's Dalí.
Maryn:

Un globo de pez
Una corazon de paz
Incapaz, no más.

translation:

A balloon full of fish
A heart full of peace
incapable of poetry no longer --
(This one is smoother in Spanish but then Dali was a Spaniard!)

Steppe
06-08-2015, 12:58 AM
ops
improper grammar
no one knowing why
not even Fowler

Kylabelle
06-08-2015, 01:54 AM
I wandered away
but came back to find this.
Fish, cheese, it's enough.

shakeysix
06-08-2015, 02:40 AM
The man in the hat
is frosted. No foot long dogs,
no lusty car hops.

C.bronco
06-08-2015, 05:32 AM
I love poetry about cheese! What could be better? It would be a tall order.

shakeysix
06-08-2015, 06:21 AM
How about movie quotes?

Make yourself a damned quesa-dilla, Napoleon! --s6

C.bronco
06-09-2015, 05:36 AM
Salty, Nutty, Sharp
We'd best take our friend Nymtoc
Sliced right off the block.
She's the Haikupopotamus, her lyrics are bottomless!

C.bronco
06-10-2015, 06:28 AM
Laverne, she'll Laverne
You, if you are that lucky.
AW matriarch.

Kylabelle
06-10-2015, 07:09 AM
Daylily crosses:
Such A Pretty Face X Sunset Buddy.
Seedling UF, phone home.


(In daylily breeding, "UF" stands for "unusual form".)

C.bronco
06-11-2015, 06:55 AM
Orlando Bloom, sigh!
Nobody misses you yet
But I'm sure they will.

C.bronco
06-13-2015, 05:37 AM
This poll will close in approximately 40 minutes! The suspense! Will Orlando be redeemed? Will cheese make a comeback? Who knows!

C.bronco
06-14-2015, 07:27 AM
And now for the amazing recap:
Shakeysix wins for Haiku honors, with Kylabelle in a close second! Equally significant was an equal number of respondents loving AW Haiku and saying, "Um, no." Cheese did sway the tide, however, which made AW Haiku favorable as opposed to neighsayers.

Sadly, Orlando Bloom had no votes, which truly makes me sad in my heart.

All in all, it was a good turnout!

shakeysix
06-14-2015, 05:44 PM
Orlando is hot
Legalos is Sindarin
Elvish ears not hot

shakeysix
05-06-2016, 05:56 PM
Chile relleno

Anaheim pepper
slit lengthwise, stuffed with jack cheese:
microwave at five.

(PS--be sure to scrape all the seeds out before stuffing and pass the salsa please!)

shakeysix
05-06-2016, 06:53 PM
Relleno dos--(Thanks to TAMaxwell)

Be sure to scrape all
the seeds out before stuffing
Pass the salsa please!

kborsden
05-16-2016, 01:00 AM
I love Haiku that are Haiku. The problem with the Westernised version is that it's usually not anything more than a hollow, distorted misrepresentation. Often mistakenly seen as a simple poem, original Haiku hide several layers of complexity behind a deceptively simple facade. The final verse is intended to reveal a profound truth or poignant thought, while the first 2 lines intend to place 2 basic subjects in juxtaposition (commonly split by exclamation or punctuation, i.e. 'cutting'). The reveal is often an unusual observation of interaction, or the result of a comparison between the subjects.

>subject one goes here<
>and here the second subject<
>insert profound truth<

An alternative structure is to cut via the entire first line with an exclamation or supposition, and then lead to the reveal to show how subject 1 (now in line 2) affects subject 2 (final line).

That said, I'm no purist--experimentation, breaking convention, these are important in poetry (but it is equally important to know what conventions are being bent/broken)--there are also those that believe the whole 5-7-5 concept is a misconception; indeed, it seems purely to be a self-imposed 'arithmetrical' element observed by English language Haiku-ists. Personally, I feel that limitation subtracts more from the form and its original intention than that it adds.

Ancient valleys—
glass and steel structures,
myth nowhere between.

It also saddens me that such a beautiful and meaningful art-form has been reduced in many cases to a medium for parody. It's a sorry, sorry thing to note that in our assimilation (better said appropriation) of such things, we tend to strip away most of what makes that something special. Yet we celebrate that... Sorry for being a party pooper :(

shakeysix
05-18-2016, 03:08 AM
Farmhouse morning, doves.
Amber bowl, ruby teacup,
oatmeal box heirlooms.

shakeysix
05-19-2016, 10:24 PM
Bayonet, butterfly
Silver sage, massasauga
Cimarron Crossing.

kborsden
05-21-2016, 12:51 AM
Rain drops tumble and drum:
tears for sadness whether
they hit the ground.

shakeysix
05-21-2016, 01:05 AM
Wild lettuce threatens.
Strawberries gone mad, grapevine,
ladybug and me.

shakeysix
05-21-2016, 05:24 PM
Arkansas: great bend.
Cimarron: sand hills and sage.
Ninnescah Big Foot?

CDSinex
05-21-2016, 10:04 PM
I hope anyone may post haiku here...

So that's how it works—
The sound of opening buds
awakens the bees

kborsden
05-23-2016, 12:12 AM
Wake up!
Or mistake the morning dew
for the crust in your eye.

kkbe
05-23-2016, 03:33 AM
Finding aye-dub was
fortuitous. Like finding
Truth. Or a penny.

:)

CDSinex
05-23-2016, 05:32 AM
Spring not quite over—
The meadow fills with fledglings
testing their new wings.

shakeysix
05-23-2016, 06:04 PM
New wings, nest weary:
fledgling audacity wins.
Jay shrieks, cat pounces.

shakeysix
05-23-2016, 06:20 PM
shakey sips her tea;
jay outrage rips tranquil yard!
Broom whack! Baby safe.

shakeysix
05-30-2016, 05:09 PM
Crooked, flap- soled, stained,
Nine garden shoes by the door.
Choose two--these will do.

shakeysix
06-02-2016, 05:01 AM
Pasture poppy, white.
Butter and eggs; cranesbill, red.
Rusted pumper? Gold!

Tazlima
06-02-2016, 05:31 PM
there are also those that believe the whole 5-7-5 concept is a misconception; indeed, it seems purely to be a self-imposed 'arithmetrical' element observed by English language Haiku-ists. Personally, I feel that limitation subtracts more from the form and its original intention than that it adds.



Plants grow where they may.
Though a small pot be their home,
with guidance, they bloom.

Words grow where they may.
Squeezed into western haiku,
Five-seven-five works.

shakeysix
06-02-2016, 06:59 PM
Five seven five +,
Does not work for me. I need
structure, a girdle!

shakeysix
06-02-2016, 07:10 PM
Exhibit A: first draft--

White: Queen Anne's Lace, Pasture Poppy,
Yellow: Compass Flower, Tickseed.
White and yellow: Butter and Eggs
Red: wild plum thicket, cranesbill
Green wheat shot with gold
That rusty pumping unit certainly ruins the landscape.
On the other hand, I sure would not mind having it on my landscape.

kborsden
06-02-2016, 07:23 PM
Words grow where they may.
Squeezed into western haiku,
Five-seven-five works.

Wild words?
Tethered to five-seven-five
are no more tame.

kborsden
06-02-2016, 07:27 PM
Five seven five +,
Does not work for me. I need
structure, a girdle!

Structure!
She exclaims--disregard,
count fingers instead.

Tazlima
06-02-2016, 07:56 PM
Wild words?
Tethered to five-seven-five
are no more tame.

Domesticated?
No. But if we stay quite still,
free words may draw near.

kborsden
03-14-2017, 05:58 PM
Domesticated?
No. But if we stay quite still,
free words may draw near.


Hush then...
inhale only
for less breath

William Haskins
03-14-2017, 08:41 PM
Green dots show you're there.
I click on the bs thread.
This place feels like home.

memories of home
illusion, wishful thinking
just an empty shell

Samsonet
03-18-2017, 07:08 AM
What is poetry.
What is haiku, what are
rep points even??

shakeysix
05-06-2018, 12:27 AM
Rep points to one side,
Fun to read when I should be
outside. --s6

DanielSTJ
05-07-2018, 10:07 PM
Outside with the breeze
The hearts flutter from the trees
Mingled with the leaves.

shakeysix
06-22-2018, 09:00 PM
Leaning on my hoe
I can see beyond this spring,
this garden, this life.