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Without context, I would assume that someone bashed at the door, cracking it.
Maybe something like:
The cover swept open with a loud crack.
I would think that the sound of a cover being removed is more like a schnick type sound, though.
Maybe something like:
The cover swept open with a loud crack.
I would think that the sound of a cover being removed is more like a schnick type sound, though.
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I think the onomatopoeia could work as long as you are clear about what's causing the door to schnick--so the full sentence wouldn't just be "The door schnicked" but something like "She schnicked open the peephole's cover."
No. I would never have guessed that, largely because I don't know what a "sweep" is.
Do you mean "snicked"? But it isn't the door that snicks. It's the clapper or the peephole cover or something. Be more precise. Why not say something like, "The peephole cover snicked shut"? (or "open" or whatever.)
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Out of context 'A sweep clacked the door.' means nothing whatsoever to me. If your target reader knows- fine.
Aim for clarity and say what you mean.
Aim for clarity and say what you mean.
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