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Steppe
03-08-2015, 07:34 AM
I


who lived
in their once world
came down this river

where have they
gone -

burnt rocks
in the fields

fish bones
that once swam
prehistoric

amour-plated
bugs


II

twang of bow-strings
still vibrate
at twilight

red shards
reflect
in the blue ripples

Stew21
03-26-2015, 09:54 PM
I like the way this one feels. It feels like Old secrets.

kdaniel171
03-26-2015, 10:39 PM
I like how it flows.

Kylabelle
03-27-2015, 01:17 AM
Evocative and ghostly, I really like this, Steppe.

I do wonder about "amour-plated bugs". Everything else is of a piece but that phrase confuses me. At first I thought it was a typo for "armor-plated" but then, no, I think he meant "amour" but, what is it?

I could take a journey with it though.

Debbie V
03-30-2015, 07:56 PM
Evocative and ghostly, I really like this, Steppe.

I do wonder about "amour-plated bugs". Everything else is of a piece but that phrase confuses me. At first I thought it was a typo for "armor-plated" but then, no, I think he meant "amour" but, what is it?

I could take a journey with it though.

I had the very same thoughts. Love does act as a protection against some things though.