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jonblondyn
12-14-2014, 08:55 PM
hey, wrote a sci-fi/fantasy journalism sketch on my site.

want to share.

if you wish to read it along to the provided music track, check out my site - blondyn.com (http://www.blondyn.com) - and touch | UNIVERSE |

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listen and read (http://www.blondyn.com/wordpress) - e=mc˛
energy = mass
traveling at the speed of light, squared.

the mass – the body – it is here.
it is tangible with the energy, abstract.
the energy is here, too.
it is between us.
it is written in the light –
the light of my | life | – shining by the force of your | love |
yes you.
the | life | and | love | are in this universe together.
you are the center of attraction, pulling this light into your eyes.
what do you see?
why have you come?
how can you be so close, so far?

with connections beyond,
together/apart
flowers as us (http://www.blondyn.com/ws/index.php?title=File:FlowVers.jpg) in bloom forevermore

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Samsonet
12-15-2014, 02:07 AM
You'll probably get more attention in the SYW section for poetry. Though that forum is mostly for critique, so... Idk.

zanzjan
12-15-2014, 05:57 AM
This really isn't the right place for this, and we generally frown on posts which are mostly about trying to drive traffic to other sites or people's blogs. So I'm closing this thread.

If you'd like feedback on this, I'd be happy to move it (sans links) over to the Poetry Critique forum. Let me know. It's also okay to link to your blog in your sig.

In the meantime, take a few minutes to read the Newbie Guide (http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?t=66315); it's full of good and helpful info :)