Hi, I'm looking for beta readers for my novel Hans and Greta. It's a retelling of Hansel and Gretel, set in the Thirties in southern California. The core of the novel is how they survive abuse and abandonment. The only hitch is that it's 157k. I've gone through multiple times looking for pleonasms, extraneous subplots, and I've tried hard to cut scenes without conflict. It'd be awesome to get another 10k out of it, but even if you just wanted to read it and tell me what worked and didn't for you, I would appreciate the feedback. I've been through it enough times recently that I seem to have reached the end of what I can do alone.
Also, if you pick it up, you should know it has strong religious content, both positive and negative. It's completely character-driven; there's no sermons, but religion is both part of their problem and part of their solution. It's not the biggest or most important part of the book, but if I cut it all, I would have to tell a different story.
The first chapter is posted on SYW here: http://absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?t=295765
I'm happy to reciprocate, but I don't read erotica or Romance. I could read two of your novels if they're shorter than mine. Examples of my crit style are in SYW in SF, historical, and mainstream. I think I take criticism fairly well, so you don't have to worry about handling me with kid gloves.
Please PM me if you're interested.
Also, if you pick it up, you should know it has strong religious content, both positive and negative. It's completely character-driven; there's no sermons, but religion is both part of their problem and part of their solution. It's not the biggest or most important part of the book, but if I cut it all, I would have to tell a different story.
The first chapter is posted on SYW here: http://absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?t=295765
I'm happy to reciprocate, but I don't read erotica or Romance. I could read two of your novels if they're shorter than mine. Examples of my crit style are in SYW in SF, historical, and mainstream. I think I take criticism fairly well, so you don't have to worry about handling me with kid gloves.
Please PM me if you're interested.
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