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Rotes
08-07-2014, 12:00 AM
Roses are red,
Violets are blue,
I hate your face.

chompers
08-07-2014, 12:07 AM
Methinks it's time for a new roommate.

cray
08-07-2014, 12:13 AM
Roses are red,
Violets are blue,
I hate your face.


i could port this over to the poetry section for critique for you?






:D

Vito
08-07-2014, 12:14 AM
:chair

M.S. Wiggins
08-07-2014, 12:21 AM
Roses are red,
Violets are blue,
I hate your face.

That's how I feel about my landlord.

Joi Phillips
10-01-2014, 11:25 AM
Oh my! I think that poem best describes someone I hate right this very moment. Unfortunately, although he is overseas, he still pops in my head just like that and I hate it.

Six Alaric
10-01-2014, 01:15 PM
Lovely.

My only complaint is with how it ends. A fourth line would really get the job done. May I point out that 'violets are blue' rhymes with 'so, screw you'?

jaus tail
10-01-2014, 09:32 PM
I would also say that a fourth line would end this well.

Suggestions...

Roses are red
Violets are blue
May an axe
Split you in two

Roses are red
Violets are blue
When you will die
None shall miss you

Roses are red
Violets are blue
Your rightful place
Is in the zoo

Xelebes
10-02-2014, 01:13 AM
I would also say that a fourth line would end this well.

Suggestions...

Roses are red
Violets are blue
I hope an axe
Splits you in two

Edited


Roses are red
Violets are blue
When you are dead
Noone will miss you

Edited


Roses are red
Violets are blue
I found your bed
Shown in the zoo

Edited

M.S. Wiggins
10-02-2014, 02:08 AM
The roses are dead.
The violets are, too.
And with the dawn;
So were you.

jaus tail
10-02-2014, 08:53 AM
Roses are red
Violets are blue
*flings vase at roommate*
Hope that didn't hurt you

It depends on how much you dislike the roommate.

Primus
10-02-2014, 10:10 AM
Short and to the point. That's an A+ in my book. Now scamper off and find that publisher.

Rotes
10-02-2014, 06:49 PM
Lol Poor Eric.
My best reviewed writing on aw is his hate letter.
\(o.o)/

Ken
10-03-2014, 05:30 AM
Roses are red,
Violets are blue,
I hate your face.

... you deserve better than this.
A nice person, like yourself.

C.bronco
10-03-2014, 05:55 AM
Just let it go and find a better apartment for a better price with a better roommate. All will be well.

William Haskins
10-03-2014, 06:01 AM
Roses are red,
Violets are blue,
I hate your face.
Your half of the electric bill is 73.18.

JimmyB27
10-03-2014, 03:06 PM
Roses are red,
Violets are blue,
I hope a lion,
Eviscerates you.