A poem for my roommate

Methinks it's time for a new roommate.

Rotes said:

Roses are red,
Violets are blue,
I hate your face.

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i could port this over to the poetry section for critique for you?

Rotes said:

Roses are red,
Violets are blue,
I hate your face.

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That's how I feel about my landlord.

Oh my! I think that poem best describes someone I hate right this very moment. Unfortunately, although he is overseas, he still pops in my head just like that and I hate it.

Lovely.

My only complaint is with how it ends. A fourth line would really get the job done. May I point out that 'violets are blue' rhymes with 'so, screw you'?

I would also say that a fourth line would end this well.

Suggestions...

Roses are red
Violets are blue
May an axe
Split you in two

Roses are red
Violets are blue
When you will die
None shall miss you

Roses are red
Violets are blue
Your rightful place
Is in the zoo

jaus tail said:

I would also say that a fourth line would end this well.

Suggestions...

Roses are red
Violets are blue
I hope an axe
Splits you in two

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Roses are red
Violets are blue
When you are dead
Noone will miss you

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Roses are red
Violets are blue
I found your bed
Shown in the zoo

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The roses are dead.
The violets are, too.
And with the dawn;
So were you.

Roses are red
Violets are blue
*flings vase at roommate*
Hope that didn't hurt you

It depends on how much you dislike the roommate.

Short and to the point. That's an A+ in my book. Now scamper off and find that publisher.

Rotes said:

Roses are red,
Violets are blue,
I hate your face.

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... you deserve better than this.
A nice person, like yourself.

Just let it go and find a better apartment for a better price with a better roommate. All will be well.

possible edit

Roses are red,
Violets are blue,
I hate your face.
Your half of the electric bill is 73.18.

Roses are red,
Violets are blue,
I hope a lion,
Eviscerates you.