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Hey AW!
I'm looking for fresh eyes on my YA fantasy. It's 85k-ish, and the query/blurb/pitch-ma-jig that I've come up with goes thusly:
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Amidst the coal-smoke grime of Allegheny City, a child’s death in a magical ritual teaches Hazel Congelier an uncomfortable truth: magic’s persecution by the Delfian Church is not quite the outdated injustice she has always imagined.
Hazel, a seventeen-year-old apprentice sorcerer, has always kept herself isolated from neighbors and schoolmates, half-content to live the safe-but-restrictive life of a girl with everything to hide. The Church has always been watching. But with a child to avenge, Church-trained soldiers patrol the streets in force, and those soldiers kill on sight. Hazel’s practiced lies and careful isolation aren’t enough to keep her safe anymore.
The city’s spell-casters are fighting back, using a more literal interpretation of the Church’s own morality—a life for a life, a Church official for a magic user. When the opportunity arises to join this plot for vengeance, Hazel leaps at the chance to reverse her lot. But murder mingles with magic and whimsy in the secret corners of Allegheny City, and Hazel has just as much to fear from her fellow sorcerers as the Church they’re fighting against.
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Also--if you stalk my old threads (which I do before offering to beta), once upon a time I posted a first chapter to SYW, but the book doesn't look anything like that anymore. Just FYI.
I'm happy to swap, but I'd really like to focus on stuff I know and like--sci-fi and fantasy MG through adult, mostly. I also like reading YA and MG contemporary, though I have little experience writing it. I'm probably not the right reader for anything with romance in the genre name (I have little experience reading it, and less writing), and I'm not super into mysteries or thrillers at any age category.
Send me a PM if you're interested in reading or swapping! Thanks, all
I'm looking for fresh eyes on my YA fantasy. It's 85k-ish, and the query/blurb/pitch-ma-jig that I've come up with goes thusly:
***
Amidst the coal-smoke grime of Allegheny City, a child’s death in a magical ritual teaches Hazel Congelier an uncomfortable truth: magic’s persecution by the Delfian Church is not quite the outdated injustice she has always imagined.
Hazel, a seventeen-year-old apprentice sorcerer, has always kept herself isolated from neighbors and schoolmates, half-content to live the safe-but-restrictive life of a girl with everything to hide. The Church has always been watching. But with a child to avenge, Church-trained soldiers patrol the streets in force, and those soldiers kill on sight. Hazel’s practiced lies and careful isolation aren’t enough to keep her safe anymore.
The city’s spell-casters are fighting back, using a more literal interpretation of the Church’s own morality—a life for a life, a Church official for a magic user. When the opportunity arises to join this plot for vengeance, Hazel leaps at the chance to reverse her lot. But murder mingles with magic and whimsy in the secret corners of Allegheny City, and Hazel has just as much to fear from her fellow sorcerers as the Church they’re fighting against.
***
Also--if you stalk my old threads (which I do before offering to beta), once upon a time I posted a first chapter to SYW, but the book doesn't look anything like that anymore. Just FYI.
I'm happy to swap, but I'd really like to focus on stuff I know and like--sci-fi and fantasy MG through adult, mostly. I also like reading YA and MG contemporary, though I have little experience writing it. I'm probably not the right reader for anything with romance in the genre name (I have little experience reading it, and less writing), and I'm not super into mysteries or thrillers at any age category.
Send me a PM if you're interested in reading or swapping! Thanks, all
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