In Query Letter Hell on here, one common complaint by critiquers is that the query a person has posted is 'mostly set-up' even when there's some form of conflict or potential conflict in the opening paragraph. However I'm wondering how much of a problem that actually is, and would love to hear from agents what they think of this.
There's a lot of near-contradictory advice out there. Plenty say it should be like a book-jacket blurb. Yet I often find those, too, only hint at the main conflict and focus on the inciting incident rather than explicitly specifying the MC's overall goal, obstacle and stakes.
I've seen advice to base the query on 'the first fifty pages' bandied about here and there, but even my google-fu searches for 'first fifty' brings up only references to partial requests and so on, not advice about writing queries based on the first fifty pages or the initial incident that moves the plot forward.
Others stress to 'show the inciting incident, main plot, and consequences for the main character if the conflict (plot line) isn’t resolved.' On QLH it’s advised generally to show the main conflict upfront, then what the MC has to do and what’s stopping her. Often when I attempt this, even at < 250 words it feels like a synopsis. I'm far from the only one with this issue either.
However I found this on one agent's* site:
I would love to know your thoughts on this, dear agents. Is it better to set up the main conflict leaving the agent dying to know what the MC’s going to do about it, or be more explicit with what MC’s going to do and what’s stopping him or her?
Show it all, or hint? Thank you.
* http://newleafliterary.blogspot.ca/2010/08/monday-monday-so-good-to-me-er-to-you.html
These authors recommend this strategy too: http://genniferalbin.blogspot.ca/2011/12/on-ninth-day-of-querymas.html
http://m-b-west.blogspot.ca/2011/06/query-thoughts.html
I also know that Ms. Nelson is on here sometimes and love to know if this is actually what you mean. I have read through your site too but I've not had much success doing searches on the old blogspot site.
Also, 'query' along with 'setup' brings up stuff about database tables
There's a lot of near-contradictory advice out there. Plenty say it should be like a book-jacket blurb. Yet I often find those, too, only hint at the main conflict and focus on the inciting incident rather than explicitly specifying the MC's overall goal, obstacle and stakes.
I've seen advice to base the query on 'the first fifty pages' bandied about here and there, but even my google-fu searches for 'first fifty' brings up only references to partial requests and so on, not advice about writing queries based on the first fifty pages or the initial incident that moves the plot forward.
Others stress to 'show the inciting incident, main plot, and consequences for the main character if the conflict (plot line) isn’t resolved.' On QLH it’s advised generally to show the main conflict upfront, then what the MC has to do and what’s stopping her. Often when I attempt this, even at < 250 words it feels like a synopsis. I'm far from the only one with this issue either.
However I found this on one agent's* site:
for an agent, that bonding process begins with the query. An overview of the whole story is not going to accomplish what a connection to the main character or the plot set-up will. Agents have to want to invest themselves in the story.
Samantha C. cited an excellent piece of advice from the always amazing Kristin Nelson: write a query based on the first fifty pages of your story. That number of pages should cover a connection to the character, as well as the set-up for the main problem/incident your character will face.
I would love to know your thoughts on this, dear agents. Is it better to set up the main conflict leaving the agent dying to know what the MC’s going to do about it, or be more explicit with what MC’s going to do and what’s stopping him or her?
Show it all, or hint? Thank you.
* http://newleafliterary.blogspot.ca/2010/08/monday-monday-so-good-to-me-er-to-you.html
These authors recommend this strategy too: http://genniferalbin.blogspot.ca/2011/12/on-ninth-day-of-querymas.html
http://m-b-west.blogspot.ca/2011/06/query-thoughts.html
I also know that Ms. Nelson is on here sometimes and love to know if this is actually what you mean. I have read through your site too but I've not had much success doing searches on the old blogspot site.
Also, 'query' along with 'setup' brings up stuff about database tables
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