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I've written a short story intended to be sent in as a contest entry, and while I have friends who are giving it a read and critique I'd be grateful for anyone who is willing to take the time to read it.
It needs to be reduced to around 5000 words for submission, and presently it's 7000. Thus I'm looking for views on words, sentences and segments that can be cut to ensure maximum leanness of prose as well as a general look-over so that I can begin round 2 of revision towards a final.
Genre: Science fiction/dystopian fiction
Word count: ~7000 (presently), needs to be ~5000
Criticism: High. Focus on succinctness of prose and leanness of plot.
Premise: Years ahead of today absolutely unrestricted free market capitalism runs the globe. In this world a freelance butcher accepts a short notice job in the middle of the night, which initially looks merely profitable in terms of pay but turns out to be worth far more.
I can PM a google documents link to anyone who is interested. Thanks for reading!
It needs to be reduced to around 5000 words for submission, and presently it's 7000. Thus I'm looking for views on words, sentences and segments that can be cut to ensure maximum leanness of prose as well as a general look-over so that I can begin round 2 of revision towards a final.
Genre: Science fiction/dystopian fiction
Word count: ~7000 (presently), needs to be ~5000
Criticism: High. Focus on succinctness of prose and leanness of plot.
Premise: Years ahead of today absolutely unrestricted free market capitalism runs the globe. In this world a freelance butcher accepts a short notice job in the middle of the night, which initially looks merely profitable in terms of pay but turns out to be worth far more.
I can PM a google documents link to anyone who is interested. Thanks for reading!