Seeking a beta reader or two for a dark fantasy story about pants

A few weeks ago I finished my story that is themed around pants. It's 6,014 words and has a rather dark aura about it.

My title is still in the works as well, as the only one that is coming to mind is rather long.

I need mostly punctuation looked at, as I still have problems placing commas in appropriate places, or not placing them at all. Me and commas are not friends at all. There are probably some other errors that I haven't caught myself.

Thanks

Ramshackle said:

I'm fully booked beta-wise so can't offer, but I'm utterly mesmerised by the thread title.

Super curious here now. Hopefully others will be too. Good luck finding a beta.

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It is an interesting story to say the least. The other one I'm still working on has hopes to be just as interesting as this one.