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I've written a story and I'm just trying to figure out with POV it is or if I have actually been switching between two different types.
At the moment the story is mainly told through the MC's POV (in third person). But there are some moments (probably about 10) throughout the book where I say what a few other characters are feeling/thinking. There are also a few moments where the reader sees things the MC can't see (e.g. a monster coming up behind him) and a moment where the narrator becomes all-knowing and talks about something the MC doesn't know.
e.g.
Before Thomas could worry too much about this, the forest thinned and they reached the bottom of a hill.
When the sun still shone Prident Hill had looked over the city – out across tents of every colour, passageways swarming with people, a vast blue lake and a thick green forest – but when Thomas and Grok reached the peak all they saw was black.
Can anyone tell me what POV I am using? I'm thinking it's third person limited, but can I still include the above paragraph? And what about the moments where I mention the thoughts belonging to the other characters? Should I try to express these emotions/thoughts through dialogue/action and then have Thomas interpret what they mean?
Thanks for any help!
At the moment the story is mainly told through the MC's POV (in third person). But there are some moments (probably about 10) throughout the book where I say what a few other characters are feeling/thinking. There are also a few moments where the reader sees things the MC can't see (e.g. a monster coming up behind him) and a moment where the narrator becomes all-knowing and talks about something the MC doesn't know.
e.g.
Before Thomas could worry too much about this, the forest thinned and they reached the bottom of a hill.
When the sun still shone Prident Hill had looked over the city – out across tents of every colour, passageways swarming with people, a vast blue lake and a thick green forest – but when Thomas and Grok reached the peak all they saw was black.
Can anyone tell me what POV I am using? I'm thinking it's third person limited, but can I still include the above paragraph? And what about the moments where I mention the thoughts belonging to the other characters? Should I try to express these emotions/thoughts through dialogue/action and then have Thomas interpret what they mean?
Thanks for any help!