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UPDATE: Not currently looking for more swaps. Though if you just want to read the chapters, I would of course be grateful for any feedback.
Hi,
Looking for some input on the first few chapters of my YA novel, MINDWALKER. I'm willing to do a swap for someone else's first few chapters; I'll read just about anything, but as genres go I'm most familiar with romance, fantasy, and sci-fi. Either line-by-line or general comments is fine. Summary below:
At seventeen, Lain Fisher is already a Mindwalker—a neuro-augmented healer with the power to dive into people’s minds and erase their traumatic memories. Slogging through images of war and abuse is a recipe for nightmares, but Lain has never turned away from someone in pain—not since her father’s suicide showed her the ugly power of despair.
Her latest client, Steven Bent, is desperate to forget the six months of his childhood he spent locked in a sadist’s basement. When Lain ventures into the twisted labyrinth of Steven’s mind, the images flicker and blur, signs that his memories have been tampered with by another Mindwalker. Probing deeper, she glimpses another layer of memories buried beneath his kidnapping—a white-walled, underground hell filled with terrified children. She starts to suspect that IFEN, the organization that trains Mindwalkers—where her father worked—has done something terrible to Steven and tried to cover it up.
Lain promises to erase Steven's past if he helps her find answers first. But since meeting him, Lain’s started to wonder—is wiping out someone’s memories and identity really healing? If she fulfills her promise, it will destroy the person he is. And the more time she spends with this broken yet surprisingly resilient young man, the more she questions everything she thought she knew about Mindwalking, her world, and herself.
Hi,
Looking for some input on the first few chapters of my YA novel, MINDWALKER. I'm willing to do a swap for someone else's first few chapters; I'll read just about anything, but as genres go I'm most familiar with romance, fantasy, and sci-fi. Either line-by-line or general comments is fine. Summary below:
At seventeen, Lain Fisher is already a Mindwalker—a neuro-augmented healer with the power to dive into people’s minds and erase their traumatic memories. Slogging through images of war and abuse is a recipe for nightmares, but Lain has never turned away from someone in pain—not since her father’s suicide showed her the ugly power of despair.
Her latest client, Steven Bent, is desperate to forget the six months of his childhood he spent locked in a sadist’s basement. When Lain ventures into the twisted labyrinth of Steven’s mind, the images flicker and blur, signs that his memories have been tampered with by another Mindwalker. Probing deeper, she glimpses another layer of memories buried beneath his kidnapping—a white-walled, underground hell filled with terrified children. She starts to suspect that IFEN, the organization that trains Mindwalkers—where her father worked—has done something terrible to Steven and tried to cover it up.
Lain promises to erase Steven's past if he helps her find answers first. But since meeting him, Lain’s started to wonder—is wiping out someone’s memories and identity really healing? If she fulfills her promise, it will destroy the person he is. And the more time she spends with this broken yet surprisingly resilient young man, the more she questions everything she thought she knew about Mindwalking, her world, and herself.
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I hope you find a beta soon!!!
