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I was doing some digging around on my old computer and found a bunch of stories I'd written ages ago. I had no clue I'd written so much. I was surprised that I'd forgotten these stories so thoroughly (lol).
I read through them again and they're actually pretty interesting, but I'll need to fix the grammar, cut out/more seamlessly integrate the infodumps (in one of them, a mentor spends two Word pages explaining the "magic" system to the MC *shiver*), and make some motivations more clear.
Still, I'm a bit anxious about the premises, which I think are pretty childish. I was a sixteen year old writing for teens on fictionpress.
One of the stories is about another sixteen year old who puts on a magical gauntlet that won't come off and the entire thing has a very comic book-ish feel. The villains are a group of ghost-like sorcerers who eat souls and the boy's gauntlet gives him super strength and the ability to wound them. After one of them sucks out the soul of his baby sister (his parents are already dead and he's very protective of her), he sets out to track them down and beats them one by one a-la Kill Bill style. I won't go into how he gets the gauntlet, but that's the general gist of things. It's equal parts dark and funny but what you see is what you get; it's not very deep.
Stuff like that. I can imagine kids liking it but I figure an editor will probably just roll their eyes, haha. The rest are a bit like this too. Should I bother cleaning them up and sending them out or should I just focus on something else?
+how do you tell if a story is too childish for publication or not?
I read through them again and they're actually pretty interesting, but I'll need to fix the grammar, cut out/more seamlessly integrate the infodumps (in one of them, a mentor spends two Word pages explaining the "magic" system to the MC *shiver*), and make some motivations more clear.
Still, I'm a bit anxious about the premises, which I think are pretty childish. I was a sixteen year old writing for teens on fictionpress.
One of the stories is about another sixteen year old who puts on a magical gauntlet that won't come off and the entire thing has a very comic book-ish feel. The villains are a group of ghost-like sorcerers who eat souls and the boy's gauntlet gives him super strength and the ability to wound them. After one of them sucks out the soul of his baby sister (his parents are already dead and he's very protective of her), he sets out to track them down and beats them one by one a-la Kill Bill style. I won't go into how he gets the gauntlet, but that's the general gist of things. It's equal parts dark and funny but what you see is what you get; it's not very deep.
Stuff like that. I can imagine kids liking it but I figure an editor will probably just roll their eyes, haha. The rest are a bit like this too. Should I bother cleaning them up and sending them out or should I just focus on something else?
+how do you tell if a story is too childish for publication or not?
