some context:
MC of my wip - woman having an affair with a married man who is pretty much a sociopath, man manipulates and humiliates her in all kinds of ways but she meets a vampire who offers her immortality, power, revenge, vampire things.
man's wife finds out about affair, comes to MC's apartment and stands on the street yelling threats and insults thru the intercom to her apartment (like in Goodfellas lol) MC goes to the roof where she is met by vampire. in a moment of absolute emotional collapse, MC relents and lets vampire turn her. she jumps from the roof, lands on her feet on the ground to confront angry wife. the shock lands wife in the hospital and obvs no one believes what she saw
husband sees this as an opportunity to have wife declared legally insane, figuring paying for her to stay in a mental facility will be easier than divorce, confrontation, guilt, alimony, child support - also, he figures something is up with his mistress, MC, and that she's trying to find him for some kind of revenge. he's using legal tactics to keep wife in hospital, having a lawyer tell the drs that his wife was unbalanced, violent, threatening to kill him and their daughters, so she's being given meds to keep her docile while knowing something's up and wanting to get out - PLAUSIBLE? i don't really know anything about hospitals or legal stuff like this, plus just wondering how this all sounds
also - one of the woman's daughters is admitted to the same hospital shortly after her, after being attacked. daughter suffered a similar bizarre attack and is being heavily medicated for her shock. the woman finds out her daughter is in the hospital. would they be able to see each other or no? i have a sympathetic nurse who lets slip to the woman that she knows what's going on with them and takes woman to daughter's room but, again, plausible?
some of the stuff i really liked when i came up with it and wrote it, but it feels like some of the hardest stuff to "sell" because i dunno how it comes off to people and translates as far as how "believable" it is (believable for a vampire novel)
thanks so much for reading and any feedback!
MC of my wip - woman having an affair with a married man who is pretty much a sociopath, man manipulates and humiliates her in all kinds of ways but she meets a vampire who offers her immortality, power, revenge, vampire things.
man's wife finds out about affair, comes to MC's apartment and stands on the street yelling threats and insults thru the intercom to her apartment (like in Goodfellas lol) MC goes to the roof where she is met by vampire. in a moment of absolute emotional collapse, MC relents and lets vampire turn her. she jumps from the roof, lands on her feet on the ground to confront angry wife. the shock lands wife in the hospital and obvs no one believes what she saw
husband sees this as an opportunity to have wife declared legally insane, figuring paying for her to stay in a mental facility will be easier than divorce, confrontation, guilt, alimony, child support - also, he figures something is up with his mistress, MC, and that she's trying to find him for some kind of revenge. he's using legal tactics to keep wife in hospital, having a lawyer tell the drs that his wife was unbalanced, violent, threatening to kill him and their daughters, so she's being given meds to keep her docile while knowing something's up and wanting to get out - PLAUSIBLE? i don't really know anything about hospitals or legal stuff like this, plus just wondering how this all sounds
also - one of the woman's daughters is admitted to the same hospital shortly after her, after being attacked. daughter suffered a similar bizarre attack and is being heavily medicated for her shock. the woman finds out her daughter is in the hospital. would they be able to see each other or no? i have a sympathetic nurse who lets slip to the woman that she knows what's going on with them and takes woman to daughter's room but, again, plausible?
some of the stuff i really liked when i came up with it and wrote it, but it feels like some of the hardest stuff to "sell" because i dunno how it comes off to people and translates as far as how "believable" it is (believable for a vampire novel)
thanks so much for reading and any feedback!