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Tinman
12-22-2012, 01:48 PM
Hi all. I need a few betas to critique a 7500 word horror short. The protag is a 15-year old, but it's definitely adult horror. No glittery vamps. No romance. It's strictly horror. Very strong language and violence. Any critiques will be appreciated: line edits, plot holes, anything and everything. Be blunt or nice, just give me the truth. In exchange, I'll read something of yours when needed.

There's an old excerpt (second draft) of it in the SYW Horror room, currently on page 4 (sorry, I don't know how to link it.)

Thanks!!!

L.Blake
12-22-2012, 06:14 PM
Pmd you

L.

haunted
12-24-2012, 09:30 PM
I'll read it. Send it to me....

Tinman
12-27-2012, 11:08 AM
L. Blake and Haunted. Thanks. I've sent PMs with the story attached to both of you.

Billycourty
12-27-2012, 09:37 PM
L. Blake and Haunted. Thanks. I've sent PMs with the story attached to both of you.

I am happy to read it too as I love horror. But i am a harse critique, be warned.

Tinman
12-27-2012, 10:48 PM
I am happy to read it too as I love horror. But i am a harse critique, be warned.

Lol. Harsh is fine. I'm not asking for critiques so people will tell me I'm the next Stephen King, I'm asking for critiques because something about the story isn't working and I need help.

I sent you a PM with the story. Any comments or suggestions will be greatly appreciated. Thanks!!!

L.Blake
12-28-2012, 07:01 AM
Never got a pm.

Tinman
12-28-2012, 11:18 PM
Never got a pm.

L.Blake. Sorry, in your case I sent it to the email address you sent with the PM. Have you not received it?

L.Blake
12-28-2012, 11:48 PM
Never got it there either. Pm it to me.

Tinman
12-29-2012, 09:45 AM
Never got it there either. Pm it to me.

L.Blake. Sorry about that. I have no idea why you didn't receive it by email. Spam filter maybe?

I sent another copy by PM. Thanks!!!!!!!

GreekArachnid
12-31-2012, 09:44 PM
I'd love to if you send me a PM, huge horror fan.

Tinman
01-01-2013, 08:28 AM
I'd love to if you send me a PM, huge horror fan.

Greek Arachnid. Hi. It should be in your PM box. Please let me know what you think. Be as brutal as you want. And thanks!!!

Jo Zebedee
01-02-2013, 04:20 AM
If you're still lookng and don't mind a newbie (I do a fair bit of critting, though), i am up for it. I have a pretty good horror pedigree. Pm me if you like, no probs if not.

Tinman
01-02-2013, 05:21 AM
If you're still lookng and don't mind a newbie (I do a fair bit of critting, though), i am up for it. I have a pretty good horror pedigree. Pm me if you like, no probs if not.

Spring. Sent it PM. You should have it by now. And, no, I don't care if you're a newbie.