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YA Dark Fantasy - 15K words

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midazolam

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Hi,

Just wondering if anyone would be willing to beta/critique my WIP. Could really use some thoughts on character, tone, and general thoughts on the story thus far. No line edits needed - this is a polished draft.

I'd be willing to swap a few chapters, but I can't commit to a full ms. Feel free to PM me or post here - thanks!!
 

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What's the story about? Give us a blurb. Maybe that'll help.

Depending on what you mean by 'dark fantasy', I might be interested.
 

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What is the story about? I may be interested as well.
 

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Sorry, guys. Here's (my attempt at) the pitch:

Seventeen-year-old Ellen Fitzgerald lives in an old tollhouse on the Susquehanna River, directly opposite the abandoned Lesker estate. When Ellen and her friend decide to cross the river and explore the property, they become trapped in a dark, sinister battle between two tollhouses, two different worlds - where loyalties are tested, enemies are made, and survival hangs in the balance.

It has elements of dark fantasy, horror, and romance.
 
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