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HLWampler
07-07-2012, 05:04 PM
I have a completed urban fantasy that I would love a beta for. It's a retelling of Little Red Riding Hood.

I've been working on this thing for so long that all of the words are beginning to smash together and make no sense at all. (It doesn't help I work 5, 12 1/2 hour shifts / week either...I don't know how I finished this thing.)

What I would really love advice on is if the characters are at least somewhat believable/sympathetic, does the writing style flow or is it choppy, is the beginning interesting enough and are there any super boring parts, anything else that may put off the reader, and any grammatical issues that are blaringly obvious.

I have revised, rewriten and edited this thing till my brain felt like mush. Then I did it again. I also had a few of my English teacher friends do a read and help me out some more so I'm fairly confident in the grammar, puncuation and typos. They seemed to like it, but they are my friends and friends can big time fibbers. I would love an honest and unbiased critique.

I am also willing to swap. I don't plan on starting my book 2 for a few weeks and in my downtime at work I read. (When I get downtime.)

Merlumen
07-14-2012, 01:56 AM
Hey there!

I don't have anything to swap at the moment but I'd be willing to help you out!

PM me! :D

frankie say relax
07-14-2012, 08:24 AM
I don't have anything to swap at the moment but I'd be willing to help you out!

PM me! :D

I second this :) My WIP is nowhere near ready to swap but yours sounds like something I would really enjoy

Adrianna Burch
07-18-2012, 10:44 PM
This seriously sounds like something I'd be interested in. Like the others, nothing of mine ready (unless you're willing to look at something unfinished), but I'm willing to beta.

CQuinlan
07-19-2012, 05:29 AM
Mine is far from swap ready but I'd love to help. (I mean I have a few chapters you can hold hostage but be warned, they haven't been neutered yet so they may hump your leg or even bite you with their awfulness)
Do you have any specific worries? Bits that might be confusing, wordiness, dialogue worries or character discrepancies you want us to be on the look out for?
PM me and I'll send on my email to you if you'd like.