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There is a certain story structure that goes like: main character stumbles across some strange stuff, investigates it, then discovers a conspiracy/huge secret/amazing truth.
Should we reveal it all in a query--or use the last part only in the form of a teaser?
For example (totally made up): MC's sister is kidnapped, MC sets out to find her, MC finds out she was kidnapped by werewolves, and at the end MC finds out that a secret organization of werewolves plans to turn everyone on the planet into a werewolf to end the industrial age. Where would I need to stop in a query letter if the secret organization stuff happens only in the last few chapters, the rest is an investigation/adventure leading up to it?
If Pullman was writing a query for the Golden Compass, would he need to reveal what they really needed the kids for? Or would he end the query saying that Lyra sets out to find them against incredible odds?
Should we reveal it all in a query--or use the last part only in the form of a teaser?
For example (totally made up): MC's sister is kidnapped, MC sets out to find her, MC finds out she was kidnapped by werewolves, and at the end MC finds out that a secret organization of werewolves plans to turn everyone on the planet into a werewolf to end the industrial age. Where would I need to stop in a query letter if the secret organization stuff happens only in the last few chapters, the rest is an investigation/adventure leading up to it?
If Pullman was writing a query for the Golden Compass, would he need to reveal what they really needed the kids for? Or would he end the query saying that Lyra sets out to find them against incredible odds?