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robertbevan
10-06-2011, 02:30 AM
warning... language (not so much on here, but in the story itself)

just another dreary friday night at the chicken hut. tim and his barely tolerable group of friends are getting ready to settle in for a night of tabletop roleplaying and beer. only tonight, since none of them want the responsibility of running the game, they've invited a guest.

if tim finds his friends barely tolerable, mordred finds them completely intolerable... so much so that he magically sends them into the fantasy world that he's created as the characters that they've created.

one second they're playing a harmless fantasy game, and the next... shit gets real.



if you're on the fence as to whether or not this is your cup o' tea, you can read a bit on the following thread in the syw forums:

http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?t=225617

the latest revision of chapter 1 is on post #82 of that thread, and the beginning of chapter 2 (when shit gets real) is on post #90.

i'm happy to swap. fantasy (except for the kind in which everyone's name is a jumble of "Q's" and "Z's" and seventeen apostrophes) is what i'd prefer to read, but i'm open to other genres.

telford
10-06-2011, 09:21 AM
PM on its way.

robertbevan
04-03-2012, 04:27 AM
well, it's been a while, and i've had one beta reader decide it wasn't his thing, and two other beta readers go through all of it and clean it up quite a bit.

i've just finished a major revision, which included fixing my pov problems (which was a bitch).

i'd like at least one more beta to run through it and tell me if they think it's ready, or if they see a bunch of shit that just isn't working.

if you're into roleplaying games and judd apatow movies, i think you'll find something in here to enjoy.

and of course, i'd be willing to look at your work as well, if you like. i haven't been on syw in a while, but if you click on my name and dig up some of my older posts, you'll see that i put some effort into my critiques.

thank you.

lbender
04-03-2012, 06:19 PM
Don't really have the time for doing betaing right now, but your novel sounds somewhat similar to Joel Rosenberg's Guardians of the Flame series, where D&D players are whisked elsewhere and become their characters. Is this something like that?

robertbevan
04-04-2012, 03:54 AM
Don't really have the time for doing betaing right now, but your novel sounds somewhat similar to Joel Rosenberg's Guardians of the Flame series, where D&D players are whisked elsewhere and become their characters. Is this something like that?

yeah, the premise is something like that. i haven't read the books, but other people who i've explained my premise to have mentioned the series. i read the wiki description of the books, and from what i can tell, they are a lot darker than mine.

RichardFlea
04-13-2012, 02:23 AM
Hey Robert,

Good to see you again. Let me know if you are still looking for a Beta. Would love to do a trade.