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I'm searching for the right word to use in my story. It's a vanilla erotica, meant to appeal to men and women. There's a scene where the woman is doing a little strip-tease, and just removed her skirt. So as I describe the scene, he looks down, and I want to say something along the lines of this:
"Adam's mouth fell slack. Beneath the garter belt, Erica wore no underwear at all. He swallowed. Even better, her _____ was smooth and clean...she'd gotten a bikini wax! It was the first time she'd done that in years, and his cock swelled, chafing against his zipper."
So I'm looking for a word there. I don't think pussy is appropriate, is it? Would a guy use that word for the outside area? Even if "pussy" were appropriate, I'd prefer not to use there, as it's going to get used a few times in the next few pages.
I also don't want to choose too vulgar of a word, because this is plain vanilla erotica meant to appeal to women too. Plus the couple is actually very conservative--this is their first taste of doing something wild. If it were a historical, I'd probably use the word "mound", but that sounds silly to me in modern context. Not that it sounds great in historical context, lol.
AAAACK! Need help!
And to be honest, I'm not really crazy about the "smooth and clean" part either. I'd love to hear some alternatives. Geez, that whole passage is sounding so clunky to me.
Thanks!
p.s. Do they remove all the hair when they do a bikini wax? Or am I thinking of a Brazilian Bikini wax?
"Adam's mouth fell slack. Beneath the garter belt, Erica wore no underwear at all. He swallowed. Even better, her _____ was smooth and clean...she'd gotten a bikini wax! It was the first time she'd done that in years, and his cock swelled, chafing against his zipper."
So I'm looking for a word there. I don't think pussy is appropriate, is it? Would a guy use that word for the outside area? Even if "pussy" were appropriate, I'd prefer not to use there, as it's going to get used a few times in the next few pages.
I also don't want to choose too vulgar of a word, because this is plain vanilla erotica meant to appeal to women too. Plus the couple is actually very conservative--this is their first taste of doing something wild. If it were a historical, I'd probably use the word "mound", but that sounds silly to me in modern context. Not that it sounds great in historical context, lol.
AAAACK! Need help!
And to be honest, I'm not really crazy about the "smooth and clean" part either. I'd love to hear some alternatives. Geez, that whole passage is sounding so clunky to me.
Thanks!
p.s. Do they remove all the hair when they do a bikini wax? Or am I thinking of a Brazilian Bikini wax?