JustRite said:
Hi,
I am thinking of attempting NaNoWriMo and am thinking of finally writing a story that has been in my head for some time now.
I would love a plot critique.
Hero/heroine have some previous history. Hero has made it big and has dated all the svelte, debutante types and is bored out of his wits with them. He decides that he should have a baby and eliminate the wife part. He runs into the heroine and proposes that they have a baby together. When she hesitates, he tries to convince her that having a baby is something she always wanted and since there isn't a guy in the picture he is her best bet. She agrees to it against her better judgement. She has some complications and he has her move into his house where he takes care of her. However, when he proposes marriage saying they already have a baby, she goes away. She goes into labor and the doctor sends for the father. Mom and daughter are well. Afterwards, she comes to know from one of the nurses that her "husband" asked her doctor to save her life over her unborn child's when they ran into complications. She realizes he loves her too and alls well that ends well.
Please don't hold back!
LOL - Sounds very much like my first novel,
The Baby Plan, complete with the original ending that I'd intended (that the black moment involved the hero choosing the life of his wife over the baby he'd wanted so badly - though, of course, this being a romance novel, and needing the HEA, the baby would also have survived.) However, my very 3-D heroine didn't like that plan at all, and she came up with a better plan, since my book turned out to be HER story instead of his. <G>
So, anyway, part of my point is that there are no new plots and it's your characters that are either going to let you pull this story off or not. Do you have a good sense of who they are before you go into NaNoWriMo? Why would she agree to do this?
Also, my biggest suggestion for you is CONFLICT. What is that's keeping these people apart? The baby is what brings them together, but what is keeping them apart? He wants a baby, but not a wife, but why would he want to have a baby with someone who is going to want that baby, too? Wouldn't he be looking for a woman who will willingly walk away from the baby?
Remember, in a romance novel, it's a given that your characters are going to end up together - so you must TORTURE them on the way to the HEA. <G> They aren't looking for love, but it happens. Conflict is all the stuff that gets in the way, and I'm not just talking about external stuff, but more importanly, the internal stuff.
To use an example I'm familiar with, in my book that's similar to the story you're outlining here, my hero was looking for a surrogate. He didn't want a wife, just a baby. Conflict came up in the form of my heroine - she was an illegitimate child herself, and she wouldn't carry a baby for him unless he married her. Of course, once he finally agreed to that, it only led to further complications for them, not the least of which was the messy fact that they were falling in love with each other. He didn't WANT to love a woman who could plan to walk out on her child - his mother had done that to him. (That was something the hero and heroine had in common.) So, he wants her to have his baby, but he sure as hell doesn't want to LOVE her.
Her internal conflict had to do with her self-eteem issues. The primary external manifestation of that was the hero's brother, who was a cop, and he didn't like the heroine at all. (She has a criminal record.)
Are you familiar with the book GMC: Goal, Motivation, & Conflict by Debra Dixon? (Available at
www.gryphonbooksforwriters.com ) That book is AWESOME! It's one I always recommend. Honestly, without the GMC concept (and Deb does an incredible job of making the concepts easy to grasp) I don't think I'd have sold my first (or second, etc.) book.
One other thing I'd recommend before you start writing is know your market for this story. What romance market specifically are you planning this for? I ask because there are other considerations you'll want to plan for. For example, as you can see, a story like this might work for Superromance, the line I write for. (Obviously, since they bought mine.) But, if you want to do that, then you want to keep in mind the word count (80-85K) as you write the story. Also, Supers are big on secondary characters and community, so you'll want that in there. And they don't like very wealthy characters, so the "made it big" and dating debutantes wouldn't work for that line.
However, if you wanted to write it as say, a Desire, you'll have to keep in mind that those are on the sexier side, and also they're very short, 55K, so you have to limit/control the secondary characters & plotlines.
Also, be free to allowing the characters to take control of the story, for example, how my heroine changed the entire end of my book. <G>
Does any of that help at all?
Susan G.