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Hello! I have a novella called Finding Fiona that needs a few betas. Technically, it's science fiction, but it's very "soft." It also has action/adventure and bits of young adult, mystery and even fantasy (because as far as I know this science is impossible).
Synopsis:
When Fiona woke up on the harbor with burns on her arms and stab wounds, she had no memory. A year later, she's still unclaimed and ridden with amnesia. On the day of her high school graduation, though, a familiar face shows up and tells her they knew each other. He says her parents were killed in a fire and the men responsible are still looking for Fiona. He leaves her with their names and her old journal, but Fiona soon finds out that the girl she's supposed to be also died in the fire. The journal also mentions something called The Remus Project that seems to have the ability to make replicas of live humans. She goes on a journey to find out who she is and eventually has to face the men responsible for her parents' death.
I need:
- Thoughts on characterization, especially when it comes to the "villains."
- General thoughts on plot and pacing.
- A relatively quick response - a month would be great, I'm planning on publishing it on Kindle and my goal is April.
- Not necessary, but some science help would be great, too. I have no idea how someone might go about making a replication machine and don't even know where to start.
It's 39K and second draft. It's a pretty fast read, in my opinion.
I'd love to reciprocate, but I need to be realistic. I already have a couple other novels I need to beta. I'd love to return the favor in the future, though.
ETA: If you're interested, PM me or comment here Thank you!
Synopsis:
When Fiona woke up on the harbor with burns on her arms and stab wounds, she had no memory. A year later, she's still unclaimed and ridden with amnesia. On the day of her high school graduation, though, a familiar face shows up and tells her they knew each other. He says her parents were killed in a fire and the men responsible are still looking for Fiona. He leaves her with their names and her old journal, but Fiona soon finds out that the girl she's supposed to be also died in the fire. The journal also mentions something called The Remus Project that seems to have the ability to make replicas of live humans. She goes on a journey to find out who she is and eventually has to face the men responsible for her parents' death.
I need:
- Thoughts on characterization, especially when it comes to the "villains."
- General thoughts on plot and pacing.
- A relatively quick response - a month would be great, I'm planning on publishing it on Kindle and my goal is April.
- Not necessary, but some science help would be great, too. I have no idea how someone might go about making a replication machine and don't even know where to start.
It's 39K and second draft. It's a pretty fast read, in my opinion.
I'd love to reciprocate, but I need to be realistic. I already have a couple other novels I need to beta. I'd love to return the favor in the future, though.
ETA: If you're interested, PM me or comment here Thank you!
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