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Herb
09-17-2005, 11:29 PM
Crazy Dream



Verse 1



Last night I had this crazy dream

You were right next to me

We were in a small town

And you were in a wedding gown

You were sayin that I do

I was sayin it right back to you



Chorus



Can you see Iím in love with you

This feeling I can not undo

Oh baby donít you feel it to

Oh come on and fall in love with me



Verse 2



I had this crazy dream

With you right next to me

We were makin love right

Oh it was out of site

You said you loved me

I said it right back to you



Chorus



Can you see Iím in love with you

This feeling I can not undo

Oh baby donít you feel it to

Oh come on and fall in love with me



Chorus



Can you see Iím in love with you

This feeling I can not undo

Oh baby donít you feel it to

Oh come on and fall in love with me

Oh come on and fall in love with me

Oh baby fall in love with me

JustRite
09-18-2005, 10:45 PM
HI,
With the disclaimer that I know NOTHING about songwriting - haven't ever written one (well, just one that I was about to post here), I like it. But I do think the Verse 2 is too weak. But the rest of it is very good.

Jim Colyer
09-19-2005, 04:22 AM
Hey Herb

I critiqued your song over at Tunesmith. I like to see a guy promoting the hell out of his song. That is the only way to get it out there.

My 100 song lyrics are available at Publish America.
http://www.publishamerica.com/books/10647

Save The Planet http://jimcolyer.com/@tracks/20/lofi.mp3

Jim Colyer http://www.jimcolyer.com

DeathsLove
09-27-2005, 06:25 AM
i like this song :Clap: I wanna hear it!