View Full Version : Erotic story needs a read

08-29-2010, 11:10 PM
Okay, I posted in SYW for someone to read my adult fiction and I thought I would try here as well.

It is a story of two beautiful women who drug and rob men in the wealthy playgrounds of Los Angeles. I am happy with 95% of it, but the ending needs, in the words of John Lennon- HELP.

I will happily offer my two cents to anyone needing same.