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engrose
09-11-2005, 10:45 PM
I wrote this song a good few years ago. It has a Tune but i haven't written the music for it as yet. Well when i get chance to get my keyboard out! Any feedback welcome. I am also selling my songs if your intrested in any.




The Sound Of Your Tears

Lets sit around
Waiting for the sun to rise
Lets sit around
Waiting for the moon to fall
By the water
As it glistens
You could listen
To the sound of your tears
To the sound of your tears


Lets walk around
Picking up the butterflies
Lets walk around
Not telling each other lies
Why Iím singing
You could listen
To the sound of your tears
To the sound of your tears


Lets lay around
Thinking of our loved ones
Lets lay around
Thinking of up above
Why Iím thinking
You could be listening
To the sound of your tears
To the sound of your tears

I listen to the sound of your tears
Every day and night
Heíll come back to you I hope
Cause I canít listen
To your broken heart
And the sound of your tears
And the sound of your tears

rtilryarms
09-12-2005, 06:43 PM
Songs are so hard to critique in poetry form.
i suggest that you introduce the genre.
for instance, "i wrote this song as contemporary hip-hop. i envision it sounding like a song in the style of [place name here]. The main instrument is [bass or something]

The closest song to this would be [].


I like the words, deending on the music.
This song is a nice love/friend theme. i hear music as if Barry Manilow were working the ivories and singing in a slow seranade.

Om the other hand i hear a raspy Rod Stewart.

Which one or another is more appropriate?

engrose
09-13-2005, 07:37 PM
last time i heard rod steward was in 1998 when i was stood right next to the stage and he stood in front of the speaker with the mic and defened us all lol. umm its a love kinda song. I know the tune but haven't put anything to it so i can't tell you what it could be like or with. and right of the top of my head i can't tell you what it would be like either its hard to desribe a tune.

JustRite
09-28-2005, 12:55 AM
I loved it. But I did not understand the "Why" in why I am thinking and Why I am singing.

It has a nice flow to it. I bet it will lend itself easily to music.

engrose
10-20-2005, 02:37 PM
I loved it. But I did not understand the "Why" in why I am thinking and Why I am singing.

It has a nice flow to it. I bet it will lend itself easily to music.

opps that should be WHILE

Ashleen
02-22-2006, 02:33 AM
I like it. I thought the last verse was going to be a bridge because it kind of changed the perspective: till then it sounded like a "we" song and in that verse it changed to a "you two" song. Oh, and "lets" sounds like it's an abbreviation of "let us," and so should be spelled with an apostrophe s.

-- Ashleen

leftyjo
03-28-2006, 06:36 AM
I love how that ends. absolutely love it. I can picture Teddy Geiger singing it, although his songs are a lot more words/metaphorical, lol.

Some of the places are slightly awkward syllable wise, but I'm no songwriter. Besides, I don't know the tune. If I knew it the song would probably fall into place.

Cheers! so sad but happy...

LJ

Jim Colyer
05-20-2006, 01:11 AM
Very poetic, but there are melodies to fit these kinds of lyrics.

emerald dragonfly
05-20-2006, 05:46 AM
Can't wait to hear it to music!

LaBell
07-04-2006, 10:03 PM
I LOVE it! I can just imagine it with a melody! I hope you'll let us hear it when you put it to music. :)