Here's the first chapter
ok so i want constructive critism on the first chapter. be warned this IS a rough draft and probably has a few typos, in the process of fixing that. if anyone would like to read more please PM me for the rest. Be honest and tell me what you think.
The Event
So today is the big day! I have waited for three weeks for today and now Friday is finally here. I asked my boss Rochelle for a raise and she told me she would let me know after her vacation. Well she got back two days ago and today is her first day back to work. I work at a high-end nail salon called “Rochelle’s Heavenly Nails”. As far as small towns go, like the one I live in, Rochelle’s salon is very classy, and so is Rochelle.
I have worked for Rochelle for six months now. I started out as a receptionist while I finished cosmetology school. Shortly after starting, I got my license and was promoted from receptionist to pedicurist. I know, why waste a full license just so I can work on feet all day right? Well I had to learn the hard way that styling hair just was not for me. Fortunately, for me I am paid extra for having the extra license so no complaints from me. However, I charge only $10.00 more than the other girls that work here and I feel as though I should be making more. By the way, my name is Alexandra Chance, but called me Alex.
So I asked for a raise and here I am. I am not sure why this morning I woke up in such a good mood but I did and I am going to run with it. I got dressed for work wearing my uniform style black dress pants and white blouse and fixed my deep auburn hair and out the door, I went. The whole drive to work I was so nervous. This was my first real job and it really meant a lot to me.
If I get my raise, it would do so much for me. I currently live in a boarding style house where I rent a room with a bathroom. All of the renters share a kitchen and common area. With this raise, I would be able to afford my own apartment and maybe have some left over money for spending, try to enjoy life.
After work I have, a date with Cody Mitchell is my boyfriend. Where do I start with Cody? He is not exactly my type of guy. He is tall and well built due to his job at a construction company road crew, and his obsession with looks. Cody is the stereotypical gorgeous person with a chiseled jaw and blue eyes, with short bleached blonde hair. His main priority in life is his looks. I met him through my sister Stephanie. They are the same age and went to school together. I thought they dated at one time but Steph says no so she says he is game for me. She said we were a match mate in heaven. Not really. Tonight will be our fourth date and he has not won me over yet. In fact, I have only kissed him a couple of times. Cody is nice and we have a good time but I just feel like something is missing.
I was still trying to figure out what was missing as I pulled into work. Our company logo is a set of bright red nails on a cloud. That sign always makes me smile. As I walked into work, I was hit with the smell of acetone and acrylic, a smell that never leaves. It is funny, that smell makes me so nausea yet it is a smell that is like home to me. Anytime I feel lost or as if I am not fulfilling my potential the smell of the nail salon brings me back, making me feel like I have a purpose.
“You’re early,” said Rochelle
“Umm yeah I was hoping I could talk to you.” Great she is in a delightful mood. Rochelle is about fifty years old and still dresses as if she is twenty. She always wears her matching red nail polish and lipstick and accents her look in a bright color scarf. Today she picked teal. Rochelle is very rich and likes it when everyone she looks at knows it. She loves it flash around her money. That is her soul purpose in life, just look at her Bentley.
“My dear I cannot be held up all day.”
“Ok, well I was just wondering if you had a chance to think about my pay raise request. “
“My dear, why do you even deserve a raise? “
“Well I think I bring in good revenue and I haven’t had any customer complaints. “ I could barely say the words, I was shaking so badly.
“My dear I know your product, what I do not know is why you deserve to charge more.”
Isn’t that why? “Well because…umm….because…..”
“My dear, do you think you’re a dam good stylist?”
“Yes.”
“Then you deserve it.”
“Really?” Talk about shock. That was easy enough.
“I’ll put you in the book for…..what do say to $75.00 per pedicure?”
“I say great! “Wow really? I was making $60.00 and all but one other girl makes $50.00, and the other girl is Rochelle’s daughter and she brings in $90.00.
“Alex, do not make me regret this.”
The rest of the day went by fast. We were booked solid for a Friday so I only got my lunch hour break. I was surprised when the five o’clock bell rang that I was time to go home. Cody would be picking me up at nine o’clock so I had a few hours to go home and get ready.
After I got out of the shower, I turned on the news at six. The newscaster seemed concerned, “Anyone in the town of Lankton needs to stay in doors. There has been an accident at Ford’s research base and it is believed that the air may be contaminated. Lankton Township please stay in doors”
Wonder what happened? Ford’s research center is about six hundred miles away from my town and is usually used to research and test new medications developed for the FDA. What could have gone airborne?
The news did not say much else about Fords so I turned off the TV and finished getting ready. I put on a pair of dark wash jeans and a black dress shirt. Cody would be here in about two hours. What am I going to do for two hours?
“Alex!”
Apparently, I have a visitor and she let herself in, “In here Steph!”
“Alex you’re never going to win Cody over by wearing jeans” she said as she walked into my bathroom.
“Why not?”
“He’s the kind of man who loves dresses, you know, easy access.”
“Well he’s not getting any access.”
“Why not? He’s so gorgeous.”
And it starts “Steph I told you I’m not going to give it up to just anyone. Besides this is only date four.”
“And you should have gave it up date one! Do you plan on being a virgin forever?”
Cody is definitely Stephanie’s type of guy. She always falls for the pretty boy type. Stephanie is two years older than and the total opposite. She is pretty and stick thin and the most outgoing person I have ever seen. I am plain, a size six and shy.
“So girl did you get your raise?”
“Yep.”
“Oh I’m so proud of you” she screeched and gave me a big hug. She is a handful but I still love her.
“Did you hear about ford’s research center?”
“Did I look like I’d care?”
I could have guessed she did not watch the news. “I guess not.”
Although we are so different, Stephanie and I grew up very close. Our dad skipped out on us when I was barely born. Our mom died last year in a car accident. She worked three jobs just to put food on the table so Steph and I were all each other had. Steph always wanted me to join the cheerleading squad and go to prom, but I was never interested in that stuff.
Stephanie is in college taking the mandatory classes. I think she is still undecided about her career choice. I would be surprised if she ever found one and stuck with it. Stephanie can be the most scatterbrained person when she is not into something. She promised our mom she would go to college so here she is, changing her major every semester.
“Alex you really should dress sexier for this date. Cody is one of the best looking guys in town and has a killer body to match.”
“I know he is. I am just not convinced he is the right guy for me. He is not exactly my type. I know relationships shouldn’t be based off looks but there should be some kind of physical attraction.”
“With Cody there’s a lot more than attraction.”
“With Cody it’s strictly personality for me. He’s a sweet guy.”
“I’ll never understand you Alex. You’re dating prince charming and you think he’s just sweet?”
“I guess so.”
We sat and talked for another hour before I finally kicked her out so I could finish getting ready. Cody would not be here for another thirty minutes so I turned on the TV.
“We repeat if you live in Lankton or any of the surrounding area please get to the high school gymnasium as soon as possible. This is not a drill. Report to the gym and do not bring any possessions. Do not waste any time…...”
The news reporter looked very concerned now. What kind of accident was this? Earlier the news had said there was an accident and it may have contaminated the air. Maybe too many people were panicking so the police were sending people to the gym as a precaution. I wonder what kind of medicine they were testing that could have caused this. Well one thing for sure, when the police release the name I am never taking it.
Knock knock knock
Its nine o’clock already? I was so caught up in what is happening in Lankton I completely forgot about Cody. I turned off the TV and slid on my grandmother’s bracelet, grabbed my purse and walked out the door. “Hey, sorry Cody, I got watching the news and lost track of time.”
“It’s ok Alex. You look beautiful. Ready to go?”
“Yeah. So where are we going tonight?”
“There’s a small Italian diner down the road. They make the best cheese ravioli in town.”
It was only about a ten-minute drive to the restaurant. As we pulled in, I saw the sign that read “Antonio’s”. What an original name for an Italian restaurant. The little man with the long black mustache smiling and holding a pepperoni pizza did not help this places cause. I really hope the food is better than the presentation.
We seated ourselves towards the back of the diner. All of the tables were small and round with a pizza slice decorated tablecloth. Cody did most of the talking. He told me about his days at work, how boring it is pouring the new curbs that were being put in on Main Street and how hot it is out in the sun. As much as I really tried to pay attention to what he was telling me, I just had other thoughts in my head.
When Cody regained my thought, he was stretching his back so far that I could see his abs. I cannot really fault Cody, he is tries to be a gentleman but his ego always seems to get in the way. If it is an arm wrestling match between manners and brawn, Cody’s body will always win. When he is focused on being a gentleman, he really does a nice job. Cody always takes me back to my door at the end of the night and always shows up with flowers and complements me frequently.
“So Alex did you get your raise?”
“Surprisingly yes.”
“See I told you Rochelle isn’t so bad. You just got to be on her good side.”
“Did you hear about what’s happening in Lankton?”
“Yeah, not a big deal.”
“Why not?”
“We were talking about it at work. My supervisor said the facility was transporting some kind of liquid and it spilled. I guess whatever it was has a strong smell to it and the facility was worried the townspeople would get sick so they told everyone to come to the gym for breathing masks.”
“Oh “was all I could say. It still sounded really nasty though. That news anchorman looked like it was more serious than that. Probably part of his job to look concerned.
“What are you doing tomorrow morning?”
“Nothing, I think.”
“Would you like to join me at the Rec around 8am?”
I guess I knew this was coming. “The Rec” is the local workout gym and Cody is such a body perfectionist it was only a matter of time before he tried to slim me down. Not that I am overweight, a small size six and I do have a flat stomach, just more of me to love. Well a quick run could not hurt and it may help me get to know Cody even more.
“Sure, sounds like fun.”
Okay, I’ll pick you up around 7:45am.”
We ate our meal while continuing to chitchat. Since we were getting up so early, we called it an early night around 11:00pm. As usual, Cody walked me up to the door.
“I had such a nice time with you tonight. Do you want me to walk you to your room?”
“No, that’s okay, I’ll be fine.”
“I can’t wait to see you again.”
“Early morning.”
“I bet you’re just as beautiful.” He bent down and gave me a tender kiss. Maybe I was too judgmental about him. I walked up to my room and closed the door with a smile on my face. As I changed into my pajamas I realized how good today actually went.
As I grabbed my wrist to take off my bracelet I realized it was gone. What happened to it? I searched frantically around my room but saw nothing. I walked the halls of the board house, the sidewalk outside but no bracelet. That bracelet has been in my family for eighty years. It was my grandmother’s. She was given it as a tenth birthday present from my mom. It was a simple silver chain bracelet with three rubies shaped into a heart dangling from it. I called Antonio’s but they were already closed. I will have to check Cody’s truck in the morning and have him swing by the diner before we head to the gym. I hope it is still there.
As I lay in bed, I tried to keep my mind off the whereabouts of the bracelet. Try to think of all the good. I am finally going to be making good money at work and Cody has a lot of potential as a serious boyfriend. Maybe I can talk him into lunch after we leave the gym. This day was basically perfect.
I hope tomorrow is the same.