I was going to post this in Query Letter Hell SYW, but I thought it might be more appropriate here.
I've been silently reading query letters in 'hell' for the past few months. I can't begin a query letter by jumping into the story---without smirking and feeling like a dork. From my recollection, every single query letter begins this way...just taking the agent right into the story. I can't stop myself from beginning mine with an introduction before going into the pitch.
I think this comes from my querying magazines and newspapers. Doing this seems---perhaps erroneously---more officious and professional. Which is why I think I stop myself from creating query letters for manuscripts that begin:
By the way, that was totally made up...I just wanted to use something for an example. I understand that the first line of your pitch should grab the agent...but is there anything wrong with a brief introduction prior to jumping in in this fashion? Does anybody here query in different ways than what seems to be the norm?
I just can't do it. I have to begin:
Again, that was just an example too. I just feel fake and phony and dumb if I do it as in the first example.
I know that my way works, because I have received several requests...but should I bite the bullet and do it the other way? Are the ones not requesting anything reading that first line and tossing my query aside?
I thought this could be a productive discussion. Any little bit helps in the world of query letters, right.
I've been silently reading query letters in 'hell' for the past few months. I can't begin a query letter by jumping into the story---without smirking and feeling like a dork. From my recollection, every single query letter begins this way...just taking the agent right into the story. I can't stop myself from beginning mine with an introduction before going into the pitch.
I think this comes from my querying magazines and newspapers. Doing this seems---perhaps erroneously---more officious and professional. Which is why I think I stop myself from creating query letters for manuscripts that begin:
Dear Agent:
Although Florence Henderson is a brilliant ten-year old, she's not smart enough to hide the fact that she can fly from those who shouldn't know.
By the way, that was totally made up...I just wanted to use something for an example. I understand that the first line of your pitch should grab the agent...but is there anything wrong with a brief introduction prior to jumping in in this fashion? Does anybody here query in different ways than what seems to be the norm?
I just can't do it. I have to begin:
Dear Agent:
My name is _____________. I am seeking representation......blah, blah, blah.
Again, that was just an example too. I just feel fake and phony and dumb if I do it as in the first example.
I know that my way works, because I have received several requests...but should I bite the bullet and do it the other way? Are the ones not requesting anything reading that first line and tossing my query aside?
I thought this could be a productive discussion. Any little bit helps in the world of query letters, right.