Hi Everyone
I'm rewriting my entire ms in past tense, and as I do so I've stumbled across a problem.
I have a few places where I draw attention to a particular thought by italicizing it. I know that is pretty common. My ms is in first person, so in a way all of it is the mc's thoughts. But there are a few places where I just think it adds to the feel to make a particular thought stand out. Here is an example-
The office aide carried a single red rose to my desk. Who was it from? Please, don’t let it be from Dad!
So my question is- should italicized thoughts be in past or present tense? On the one hand, the entire ms is in past tense so I think the thoughts should be too. On the other hand, italicizing certain thoughts makes them seem special- more in the present than all the other thoughts. In that case, it would read-
The office aide carried a single red rose to my desk. Who is it from? Please, don’t let it be from Dad!
See how the feel of the thought changes? I have italicized thoughts sprinkled throughout my ms. Perhaps one thought every twenty pages or so. Would it be okay to switch to present tense in just those thoughts. Or should I stay consistent and keep everything past tense.
Thanks for all your help! I apologize if this seems like a dumb question- I'm still growing as a writer and I'm sure I'll have a lot more dumb questions before I'm done.
I'm rewriting my entire ms in past tense, and as I do so I've stumbled across a problem.
I have a few places where I draw attention to a particular thought by italicizing it. I know that is pretty common. My ms is in first person, so in a way all of it is the mc's thoughts. But there are a few places where I just think it adds to the feel to make a particular thought stand out. Here is an example-
The office aide carried a single red rose to my desk. Who was it from? Please, don’t let it be from Dad!
So my question is- should italicized thoughts be in past or present tense? On the one hand, the entire ms is in past tense so I think the thoughts should be too. On the other hand, italicizing certain thoughts makes them seem special- more in the present than all the other thoughts. In that case, it would read-
The office aide carried a single red rose to my desk. Who is it from? Please, don’t let it be from Dad!
See how the feel of the thought changes? I have italicized thoughts sprinkled throughout my ms. Perhaps one thought every twenty pages or so. Would it be okay to switch to present tense in just those thoughts. Or should I stay consistent and keep everything past tense.
Thanks for all your help! I apologize if this seems like a dumb question- I'm still growing as a writer and I'm sure I'll have a lot more dumb questions before I'm done.
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