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The Writer

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Thank you

Got some serious rewriting to do.
Thanks for replying, greatly appreciated!


Hello everyone,

I am looking for someone (or more) willing to read (part of) my fantasy story. For now it is about 40 000 words long, but I update it regularly. It is posted on the internet as a blog. Some of my friends read it, but I would appreciate the opinion of people who know what they are talking about.

talesofagoria.blogspot.com


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In a dimension (Agoria), based on our medieval times, live three nations of men, enemies from the beginning of time. Their hatred for each other is inborn. On earth lives a group of very close friends, some of them even dating. They all come from Agoria, but they do not know this from each other. Events unravel and they find out that they belong to the different nations. When they return to Agoria their loyalty to their people and to their friends is put to the test.


Thanks in advance,
regards
 
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Hi The Writer,

I took a look at your writing sample and immediately noticed: (1) dialogue punctuation issues; (2) lack of appropriate paragraph breaks, making it difficult to work out which line of dialogue belongs to which speaker; and (3) an overall impression of huge walls of text which are daunting to read. May I suggest that you clean up the punctuation and add paragraph breaks where appropriate? I think a little polish would make this project more appealing to potential beta readers.

Hope this helps.

Cheers,
Parametric
 
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Thank you for your response, it is greatly appreciated :)

I took down the story to work on your suggestions. (Took my lord of the rings copy by my side for guidance!)

When I finish it, I will put it back out there.

thanks again,
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I started uploading my updated posts.

I hope to get more comments!

Thanks
 
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In four hours you have considered and corrected all the points mentioned by Parametric????

I don't think so, my dear. :Hug2:


The Writer said:
I started uploading my updated posts.

I hope to get more comments!

Thanks
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I have started uploading the subchapters I finished, not the entire story of course.
 
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