I’ve lost the ability to be objective looking over my 70,000-word YA mystery-romance Undertow, so I’m seeking honest betas to look at the plot and characterisation, and tell me whether there’s something there or if I should abandon ship. Read as much or as little as you like, any critique welcome.
I had formally put the query through Query Hell (which was massively helpful, thanks to all involved), so I’ll post the start:
Sixteen-year-old Kat is a self-proclaimed pain-in-the-ass, and the President’s daughter. Hello kickin’ ’round rocks at some elite island reform school.
With a new name, new look and no Secret Service stiffs glued to her side, she might finally get a whiff of normality. If that means sneaking out only to be drugged and abandoned by your new ‘BFFs’, so be it. But nothing’s normal when you wake to find everyone’s gone, everyone except Logan – the sophomore sex god.
PM me if you’d like to discuss. I’m happy to swap for other YA, but being new to this, you’ll have to take my suggestions with a grain of salt. Thanks in advance. Note there is some laungauge and sexual elements.
I had formally put the query through Query Hell (which was massively helpful, thanks to all involved), so I’ll post the start:
Sixteen-year-old Kat is a self-proclaimed pain-in-the-ass, and the President’s daughter. Hello kickin’ ’round rocks at some elite island reform school.
With a new name, new look and no Secret Service stiffs glued to her side, she might finally get a whiff of normality. If that means sneaking out only to be drugged and abandoned by your new ‘BFFs’, so be it. But nothing’s normal when you wake to find everyone’s gone, everyone except Logan – the sophomore sex god.
PM me if you’d like to discuss. I’m happy to swap for other YA, but being new to this, you’ll have to take my suggestions with a grain of salt. Thanks in advance. Note there is some laungauge and sexual elements.
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I have a back logged to-do list, but I'd be willing to look at the first 1-2 chapters for you. PM me if interested.
