I see what you're trying to do, but this doesn't quite work. I know you're trying these short punchy sentences, but 'She hoped." seems to startle the reader instead.
Maybe try;
Yes. It was a dream, she hoped. (No quotes and no caps and a comma.)
OR
"Yes, a dream," she mumbled, hoping it was so.
OR
It was a dream, only a dream. She hoped so.
Without the surrounding sentences, it's hard to tell, but you might even try a whole new paragraph for that two-word sentence. It gives the punch some room to land.
I agree with Wayne - even in context, "She hoped" seems like too short a sentence. It's grammatically a sentence (so yes, "She" should definitely be capitalized), but it feels like it's missing something.
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