View Full Version : Exclusive Has Expired - How to Word an Email

09-18-2009, 06:16 PM
Agent One (great agent) received an exclusive on a partial for two weeks.

Agent Two (another great agent) requested partial the next day.

I emailed Agent Two that I would send the partial after the exclusive to Agent One was up. Which I will do.

Should I email Agent One that, the exclusive being up, I've started subbing partials/fulls again? If so, how to word it?

Heh, I always hoped to have these problems one day. ;)

09-18-2009, 11:18 PM
Either of these should work:

Dear Agent who sucks at deadlines:

I gave you two weeks. You blew it. Therefore, I'm sending my manuscript to other agents.


Dear Agent:

On September ??, I gave you a ??? week exclusive on my manuscript, SQUIRRELS NUTS AND HOW THEY DESTROY QUERIES, which would have been up on ??. I have another agent who is interested, and who I've told I would send the manuscript to today.

Could you please contact me and advise me of your intentions.

Thank you,

Big Bird

Personally I'd go with the second, but it's a free country. If I didn't get a reply within 24 hours, I send the manuscript to the other agent.

Best of luck,

Jim Clark-Dawe

09-18-2009, 11:22 PM
Yep. Jim's advice should work. :D


09-19-2009, 12:40 AM
Wow, I just had that EXACT same problem -- except agent #1 rejected me two days before the exclusive was up, so I never had to tell her to hurry up...

I'm not going to saying anything helpful to answer your question, but congratulations!!

09-19-2009, 12:48 AM
Go with Jim's advice. You might also mention that although the exclusive has expired, you'd still love to work with that agent and look forward to her response at a time of her convenience. Just lets her know that she's not being tossed in favour of a newer model - she's still loved and wanted. :tongue

09-19-2009, 01:11 AM
Thanks, all! And I'd never toss an agent, my signature notwithstanding. ;)

09-20-2009, 07:26 AM
I've go with a softer approach. If you email, be sure your sig line includes your phone number and general location (as the NY agent wonders what time zone the number calls and doesn't want to look it up).

Dear Agent,
Thanks again for your interest in my *genre*, Title. Now that the term of our exclusive has expired, I will make a few more queries but I do look forward to your response on my manuscript.