Help needing writing music for my lyrics

peace,

I think you could add a mellow paragraph in the middle. You obviously send out the message, but if you take your song to a level of less emotions and then suddenly increase it I think it will sound better. Like you could add some lyrics in italics and soften your voice and guitar when you reach there. I like your anti-war message. We don't hear too many of these nowadays.

Sindbad.

I like it but i agree w/ sindbad. What do u need help w/?

I know next to nothing about music composition, but have been around music (including my current stint of playing the electric bass) for long enough to realize that music is almost all about patterns.

First thing you're probably going to want to do is to figure out how many counts the lyrics of each line are going to fit in.

For example:
(granted, I'm not sure what kind of music is in the "punk acoustic" genre...)

"We are what you were" would probably work with four counts (three counts for the lyrics, with a pause on the fourth)...and you can also work in the next line "the youth of today" into the same set of four counts. Once you find the counts that work for you, try to work all your lines into that same number of counts per line.

How much of a "beginner" are you on the guitar?

OPOSITE PROBLEM

Hi I have oposite problem. I like to write music but I can't write lyrics. Send me some of yours give me few days, and I'll send you some ideas back in form of mp3.

Words like "youth" "correcting" concoctions" don't sing well with me.

You almost need to isolate those words to make em work.

Welcome aboard Way too public. great to see some new blood here. This used to be a happening place a couple of years ago.

Songwriting is a tough forum because the business is a whole nuther thing than the practice or hobby.

LaBelle is new too. Maybe we can get something going.