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One of several things I've struggled with as I've learned to write is keeping the same tense in a work. Along with passive voice. (Grr!)
So here's a paragraph from my WIP. I've been reading all about it but I think I've psyched myself out here and I think I might be scaring myself.
Also, does it sound right to you guys?
[FONT="]**The man laughed. She spun around just in time to see the glint of moonlight on a knife. She hopped back as the blade sliced into her arm. She gritted her teeth, bringing up her weapon and firing another shot. The shadow bounced around her, perching on top of one of the stone pillars. Sophie took another shot, but the demon jumped off, vanishing in the darkness.**
Thanks for the help!
I'm also open to whatever other grammatical mistakes there are in here :-D[/FONT]
So here's a paragraph from my WIP. I've been reading all about it but I think I've psyched myself out here and I think I might be scaring myself.
Also, does it sound right to you guys?
[FONT="]**The man laughed. She spun around just in time to see the glint of moonlight on a knife. She hopped back as the blade sliced into her arm. She gritted her teeth, bringing up her weapon and firing another shot. The shadow bounced around her, perching on top of one of the stone pillars. Sophie took another shot, but the demon jumped off, vanishing in the darkness.**
Thanks for the help!
I'm also open to whatever other grammatical mistakes there are in here :-D[/FONT]