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Errrr, which of those music styles is this supposed to be written in?

I have a feeling it's going to be a tough one to put to music because there's no apparent rhythm that I can see (especially with the chorus, which I started an attempt on)...

Not that it can't be done, but it's going to be a lot tougher...

Here's a trick I've used on a few...
Count off the rhythm you're using on each line (how many beats each line will take to say) and write the count next to the line. Try to get them to match with others in the piece. That makes it a little easier to know what kinds of musical rhythm you can use.

And for anyone out there also trying (at least in the rock style), the chorus sounds pretty good in B-flat minor pentatonic...

The chorus on this second one was a lot easier to come up with...
Although I would suggest either doubling up the chorus (probably the easier of the two choices), or adding four additional lines...

I'll attempt to do the rest of the second song later...

great songs, Tarra. I like 'em.

Susie

I would recommend the following form:

You've got me
Body, mind, & soul
It all feels so right
the way you make me feel
I'm all yours
Body, mind, & soul
You took me by surprise
I lost myself to you

Who knew it could be so good?

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And now for the chord layout (apologies for the formatting (which still doesn't want to behave the way I originally wanted to post it)):

(Bb) You've got me
(Db) Body, mind, & (Eb) soul
(Bb) It all feels so (Db) right
the (Eb) way you make me feel
(Bb) I'm all yours
(Db) Body, mind, & (Eb) soul
(Bb) You took me by sur(Db)prise
I (Eb) lost myself to you

(F) Who knew it could be so (Bb) good?

tarra74 said:

How is this for the chorus?

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Body mind and soul don't flow. Some words you just can't sing. It gots ta flow man.

I was looking over the thread. It seems more structure is needed in the lyrics. I live in Nashville which is a "chorus town." They like verse-chorus, verse-chorus, bridge-chorus, the bridge being 2 lines.

Jim Colyer
http://www.jimcolyer.com/music/

Save The Planet
http://jimcolyer.com/@tracks/20/lofi.mp3

I attempted to add a little structure to the chorus lyrics a few posts up...the verses themselves could use the same treatment, if I had any free time left. It's also a bit tougher to come up with a melody only working the bass line...

Quite a number of songs you have listed on your site, by the way...