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(Even tho the agent's good advice was to label my book "thriller" rather than horror, it's horror in my eyes. He said that most women skip the horror section, so if I want to get published... My target market is women 20-50.)
Here's the backstory: Limited nuclear war, civilization in the toilet. Rebuilds. 250 years later, it's an agrarain/guild society. I don't do machines well. A group of monks survived, found other survivors, and led the rebuild. They are now the government. Trouble is, they're completely nutters and have a secret agenda of killing off (horribly) anyone who they perceive as a threat.
I called them "Hermits" because of what that name said to me. The agent said (nicely) wrong, wrong, wrong. "Hermits" said absolutely nothing to him, and hey, I'm trying to wow an agent. Gotta jettison what doesn't work.
Good news: he made some great rewrite suggestions and said I could resubmit to him.
So, PLEASEPLEASEPLEASE, I need suggestions naming the bad guys! Too bad Cenobites is taken, you know? I went into the thesaurus for Tracker, hunter, Elder, Superior (I'm an ex-nun, those last two terms come automatically into the ol' brain.) I'm completely stumped.
Thanks!
- the Lily
(Even tho the agent's good advice was to label my book "thriller" rather than horror, it's horror in my eyes. He said that most women skip the horror section, so if I want to get published... My target market is women 20-50.)
Here's the backstory: Limited nuclear war, civilization in the toilet. Rebuilds. 250 years later, it's an agrarain/guild society. I don't do machines well. A group of monks survived, found other survivors, and led the rebuild. They are now the government. Trouble is, they're completely nutters and have a secret agenda of killing off (horribly) anyone who they perceive as a threat.
I called them "Hermits" because of what that name said to me. The agent said (nicely) wrong, wrong, wrong. "Hermits" said absolutely nothing to him, and hey, I'm trying to wow an agent. Gotta jettison what doesn't work.
Good news: he made some great rewrite suggestions and said I could resubmit to him.
So, PLEASEPLEASEPLEASE, I need suggestions naming the bad guys! Too bad Cenobites is taken, you know? I went into the thesaurus for Tracker, hunter, Elder, Superior (I'm an ex-nun, those last two terms come automatically into the ol' brain.) I'm completely stumped.
Thanks!
- the Lily