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"Eyes looked around the crowded room."
"Mouth twisted into a frown."
"Digits ran through smooth, black hair." (Yes, digits, not plain ole fingers.)
I've seen sentences like this in (keyword: unpublished) pieces so many times it's got me wondering if it's an OK practice. It reads like bad writing to me. For one, it drives me insane that there's no possessive pronoun (I don't care if I already know whose body part it belongs to -- write "his" or "her"!) and even if there were, why not just write "He looked around the crowded room"? I can ~infer~ that he's using his eyes.
So, tell me AW. Am I whining to whine? Is this OK? I'd never do it and it may continue to be a pet peeve, but I want to know if all of these people aren't in the wrong.
"Mouth twisted into a frown."
"Digits ran through smooth, black hair." (Yes, digits, not plain ole fingers.)
I've seen sentences like this in (keyword: unpublished) pieces so many times it's got me wondering if it's an OK practice. It reads like bad writing to me. For one, it drives me insane that there's no possessive pronoun (I don't care if I already know whose body part it belongs to -- write "his" or "her"!) and even if there were, why not just write "He looked around the crowded room"? I can ~infer~ that he's using his eyes.
So, tell me AW. Am I whining to whine? Is this OK? I'd never do it and it may continue to be a pet peeve, but I want to know if all of these people aren't in the wrong.