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ARGH!
I have spent the last 2 months writing a personal essay/memoir-thingy (actually I have spent the last 15 years writing it if you count the very first draft back when it actually happened).
I didn't know it was a personal essay at first. So I re-wrote it and crafted it into what I thought would be a great short story--but ended up bludgeoning it. And stripping it of all truth and emotion.
So--I re-wrote it back into an essay--after reading countless books and articles about how to "write tight". Weeding out all my adverbs, gerunds and the like.
Then I read something about the perils of writing "too tight". And I realized that that is what I had done.
My personal essay was now way to much "tell" and not enough "show" and I had stripped out voice and stylistic elements that I think are what made it good to begin with (though who am I kidding--I don't know if it's "good").
So--back to the drawing board--to "loosen" my writing, adding voice back in, injecting some stylistic elements like repetition for effect.
It feels a bit like I made a cake--then decided to make the diabetic version of that cake--then decided it tasted gross and went back to add the sugar back in.
I have spent the last 2 months writing a personal essay/memoir-thingy (actually I have spent the last 15 years writing it if you count the very first draft back when it actually happened).
I didn't know it was a personal essay at first. So I re-wrote it and crafted it into what I thought would be a great short story--but ended up bludgeoning it. And stripping it of all truth and emotion.
So--I re-wrote it back into an essay--after reading countless books and articles about how to "write tight". Weeding out all my adverbs, gerunds and the like.
Then I read something about the perils of writing "too tight". And I realized that that is what I had done.
My personal essay was now way to much "tell" and not enough "show" and I had stripped out voice and stylistic elements that I think are what made it good to begin with (though who am I kidding--I don't know if it's "good").
So--back to the drawing board--to "loosen" my writing, adding voice back in, injecting some stylistic elements like repetition for effect.
It feels a bit like I made a cake--then decided to make the diabetic version of that cake--then decided it tasted gross and went back to add the sugar back in.
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