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I've been overhauling my novel Everyman's Memory for the sake of believability, among other things. Even though I haven't made it past the opening chapters yet, which needed the most work, I was thinking ahead and recalled a plot point that seemed contrived, over-the-top, unbelievable, virtually impossible, etc.
Now here's the plot point (laugh if you wish; bear in mind that this is one of the few remaining remnants of the first draft that I never bothered with, mainly because of the amount of work needed):
The antagonist finds a stray cat and a blood hound to use as his weapons. He paints the cat with blood collected from a newborn that he baby-napped soon after birth; he covered his tracks and destroyed anything that could trace this back to him and/or the newborn.
He sends this (regularly docile) cat after his targets. The targets take it in thinking that someone inflicted physical harm on it due to the blood.
He also releases a blood hound (with a collar sending wireless transmissions of the hound's location) to follow the cat closely through smell. The hound has been trained to stop in its tracks once it sees the cat and move no further. Once the hound has ceased movement he shocks the dog using the collar, making the dog loose a howl. This howl sends the cat into a wild frenzy not unlike a lion or tiger pouncing on its prey.
Finally, he has injected the cat with a fast acting virus/poison that only affects humans and is transmitted by the cat's saliva. This, I fear, is the most contrived part, as I imagine it's either highly unlikely or impossible. I know there are particular diseases that only affect a particular species of animal, but I took it more than a step further into the realm of ridiculous science fiction.
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P.S. If you have any particular ideas for reworking this to a state of believability, it'd be greatly appreciated.
Now here's the plot point (laugh if you wish; bear in mind that this is one of the few remaining remnants of the first draft that I never bothered with, mainly because of the amount of work needed):
The antagonist finds a stray cat and a blood hound to use as his weapons. He paints the cat with blood collected from a newborn that he baby-napped soon after birth; he covered his tracks and destroyed anything that could trace this back to him and/or the newborn.
He sends this (regularly docile) cat after his targets. The targets take it in thinking that someone inflicted physical harm on it due to the blood.
He also releases a blood hound (with a collar sending wireless transmissions of the hound's location) to follow the cat closely through smell. The hound has been trained to stop in its tracks once it sees the cat and move no further. Once the hound has ceased movement he shocks the dog using the collar, making the dog loose a howl. This howl sends the cat into a wild frenzy not unlike a lion or tiger pouncing on its prey.
Finally, he has injected the cat with a fast acting virus/poison that only affects humans and is transmitted by the cat's saliva. This, I fear, is the most contrived part, as I imagine it's either highly unlikely or impossible. I know there are particular diseases that only affect a particular species of animal, but I took it more than a step further into the realm of ridiculous science fiction.
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P.S. If you have any particular ideas for reworking this to a state of believability, it'd be greatly appreciated.