It's 66,000 words total, in 3rd person POV. I need more of an overall impression rather than a line-by-line crit.
Here's the summary:
Raea Dahlrich has wings, a secret she doesn't even know! When she transforms during her sleep into a winged Inari, she has no idea what to do. Not a problem, at least not for Elis Jasheir, the quiet guy in her senior class that she can't stand. He's like her, a Keeper—an Inari sharing a symbiosis with the energy of the Starfire crystal. If Raea doesn't learn to control the powers of the Starfire, the entities will control her, and the only person who can teach her is Elis "Creeper". Now, if the Starfire would quit meddling in her life, she might go on dating a young foreign student. Too bad she can't get Elis out of her head. Complicating her life is Nina Russet, a nosy reporter digging into the mysterious Dark Angel sightings in their small town and who is all too ready to reveal the truth of the angel sightings.
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Here's the summary:
Raea Dahlrich has wings, a secret she doesn't even know! When she transforms during her sleep into a winged Inari, she has no idea what to do. Not a problem, at least not for Elis Jasheir, the quiet guy in her senior class that she can't stand. He's like her, a Keeper—an Inari sharing a symbiosis with the energy of the Starfire crystal. If Raea doesn't learn to control the powers of the Starfire, the entities will control her, and the only person who can teach her is Elis "Creeper". Now, if the Starfire would quit meddling in her life, she might go on dating a young foreign student. Too bad she can't get Elis out of her head. Complicating her life is Nina Russet, a nosy reporter digging into the mysterious Dark Angel sightings in their small town and who is all too ready to reveal the truth of the angel sightings.
If you're interested, please IM me. Thanks!