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maestrowork
04-19-2005, 10:22 AM
Write a poem using iambic pentameter. It can be a blank verse (not rhyming) or it can rhyme...

First theme: Full Moon

paprikapink
04-19-2005, 10:34 AM
ba dum ba bum ba dum dum dum
dit da dit da dit da da da
just to get me in the moodie
have to think about your bootie.




uh, maybe I'm unclear on the concept. but, poetically speaking, the moon theme is there, yes?

-pk

Ralyks
04-19-2005, 08:26 PM
Thank you for this prompt! It inspired me to finally get back to working on poetry again...well, at least for today, at least for this one sonnet...


The moon is full beyond the bridge tonight.
My hungry soul is not; it grinding growls;
It craves, alas, some greater form of light;
Well wolves at rocks may raise their howls,
But man must seek the source that glows
Behind the stone that stands alone encased
In blackest night. For all the petty woes
We feel will fade and fall to fertile waste
If we behold the Sun that hides its might.
So must we long and search and strive when all
Is dark and buried deep beneath our sight,
As living things that burrow in the fall.
A mirror casts an image of the man,
But nature bears reflection of the Plan.

maestrowork
04-19-2005, 10:02 PM
BEAUTIFUL, Sky!

Alphabet
04-22-2005, 04:37 AM
This is a flickering candle to skylars searchlight, but I thought I'd play the game.


I'm interested to know whether it reads better without the last couplet though.



Full Moon

A signal that a rhythm has been run
Its full course and begins to play again
A sign that time's great battle has been won
At least for now and on this earthly plane
All carries on as ever it has done
And promises to continue the same

Who seeing it could not understand this
For pure white light illuminates the truth
Though through the ages many sage have missed
The deeper wisdom to which it alludes
That burning heat we gently can resist
And stepping in may turn it to our use

We long for light, and relish we the moon
The sun, too bright and garish, can't be viewed.

maestrowork
04-22-2005, 03:15 PM
Yeah, I think it's better without the last couplet. I like it!

Yeshanu
04-22-2005, 03:40 PM
I really like the last couplet as a separate poem, though!

Ralyks
04-22-2005, 11:46 PM
Guess I'll be the devil's advocate...I think it's better with the final couplet--you need something to wrap it up and leave a punch--though maybe the last line of the couplet could be revised somewhat to have a clearer rhyme with moon. Thanks for posting!

SeanDSchaffer
04-29-2005, 11:57 AM
The full moon in the sky, it rightly shines
Within the dark of night it keepeth watch
Over the land and sea upon the earth
And o'er the fields and farms and kings of Men.

The full moon in the sky, it rightly shines
The hearts of man and beast it comforts well
As a sentinel standing watch to guard
O'er all the world below and o'er the night.

The full moon in the sky, it rightly shines
Its brightest rays that shine unto the ground
It treateth those who sleep during the day
A bit of daytime sunlight 'ere the dawn.

The full moon in the sky, it rightly shines
Within the dark of night it keepeth watch
Over the land and sea upon the earth
And o'er the fields and farms and kings of Men.