Afternoon light dappled through delicate leaves, clinging to the centuries old oak tree. Its gnarled limbs danced with nearby branches.
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What do you think?
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The tree grew for more years than Tobias witnessed, following seasons of growth and death. The oak survived before and would continue to grow long after he left. No ties held him to this land, a place where mountains met timberlines. A mysterious land shrouded in legends shared in hushed tones at the local taverns. Where ancients older than the trees walked the earth. He knew first hand there was truth in those legends, more truth than most people realized.
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What is clinging to the oak tree? The light or the leaves? If it's the light, then the first sentence is fine. If it's the leaves, then the comma needs to go. And I think centuries-old needs to be hyphenated.
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