[FONT="]An editor just sent me an edited copy of an article. I'm not thrilled with the sentence below and wonder how it could be made better. Or if I should not say anything and accept the changes they've made. I don't want to bring disagreement that would hurt chances of getting this published. The "it" is a tiny kitten.
Then it slipped down my chest into a position in which it could look up into my eyes, screaming the entire time.
I'm thinking this might be better: Then it slipped down my chest into position to look up into my eyes, screaming the entire time.
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Then it slipped down my chest into a position in which it could look up into my eyes, screaming the entire time.
I'm thinking this might be better: Then it slipped down my chest into position to look up into my eyes, screaming the entire time.
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