Teens Writing for Teens, the 5th - Page 218

lisalulu09 · 07-18-2011, 03:19 AM

Ha. I know I want to have a dream sequence in this chapter, but I'm not sure about when, in terms of which of the existing scene ideas come before and after it and what should happen in.

'Love Story' by Taylor Swift inspired a dream sequence a few chapters back, but this may be to do with the fact that it also fitted something else that happened in that scene and I had it on repeat.

Arianna Sterling · 07-18-2011, 03:21 AM

I promise the ones in Weeping I'll be nice to them for a scene, since their lives suck so much XD

lisalulu09 · 07-18-2011, 03:22 AM

Unfortunatly, there is going to be a sucky scene in this chapter.

Arianna Sterling · 07-18-2011, 03:34 AM

Awwww

Okay, question. Does this sound interesting?

Quote:

Despite the insanity of the subculture—otaku in America pride themselves on being a fun-loving, open and wacky group—there aren't really any books on the market that express what the culture is all about in a way that is both informative and entertaining. CULTURE, CONVENTIONS AND COSPLAY will fill in this gap. Rather than being in encyclopedia or essay format as a majority of books on the topic are at the moment, this book goes chapter by chapter to explain everything from what the heck a yandere is to how to properly take care of your cosplay gear in a typical fan voice. It will also include interviews from industry professionals, well-known cosplayers and a variety of other specialists (i.e. lolita, cosplay photography, artists). It is geared to appeal to the otaku community, as well as their family and friends who want to understand why their loved ones are putting on bright green wigs and vibrant stockings, and then vanishing for three days to a convention.

lisalulu09 · 07-18-2011, 03:38 AM

I'd want to read the book. It's a very good query in my opinion, but I'd advise you to put it up in QLH for constructive comments.

Arianna Sterling · 07-18-2011, 03:40 AM

I did, and one person called it uninteresting. No one else said that though, and I've shown it to a number of people, so I'm just looking for more opinions

Especially since I really freaking like that paragraph. I'm editing other parts of the query though.

Imbroglio · 07-18-2011, 03:52 AM

My life is, once again, a spiraling black abyss.

How's everyone else? Lol.

lisalulu09 · 07-18-2011, 03:54 AM

Tired. Listening to the playlist for Suns and Stars. Trying to come up with at least one more note for Chapter Eleven. My character is not cooperating. D:

ETA: Yay, I now have enough notes. Now to go to bed.

Arianna Sterling · 07-18-2011, 04:10 AM

G'night Lisa.

Hi Glo.

parumpdragon · 07-18-2011, 04:48 AM

Oooh, you are getting close to 5k in post, congrats!

Zoombie · 07-18-2011, 05:10 AM

I'm listening to the Game of Thrones and...well, the king is showing up at Main McCharacter Stark's place and he's all like, "Yo yo yo, bro, I'm bringing 100 knights with me!"

Fun fact: In France, sometime around the 13th century, an influential noblewoman was hacked to pieces by her enemies. Why? WEll, she had this nasty habit of trying to gain power, and one of the ways she did it was to bring...you guessed it...a 100 knights to various places she wanted to BEGGAR.

Do you know how much it COSTS to feed that many knights and their horses!?

amlptj · 07-18-2011, 05:11 AM

Hello all! Hows your day going... I've had a very long day, had to get up early (well early for me) then I spent like 5 hours out shopping for stuff with my mom to come home and trim my garden hedge, pull up all the weeds and then come inside and rewire my kitchen light switch, then make dinner.... Oh i'm exhausted but for some reason cant sleep

Parametric · 07-18-2011, 05:19 AM

Martin does know how much it costs. The realm is staggeringly in debt and staring at bankruptcy, and it only gets worse as wars devastate harvests and winter sets in.

Zoombie · 07-18-2011, 05:21 AM

Oh, I'm sure. I was just enjoying the historical parallels!

Heck, Stark and Starkwife went, "Augh, King, WHY YOU DO THIS!? SO MUCH COST!"

amlptj · 07-18-2011, 05:49 AM

So what's new with everyone?

Arianna Sterling · 07-18-2011, 06:18 AM

Well, I vanished to the store for awhile, bought some new headphones.

Maybe I should try to do a bit of writing now.

amlptj · 07-18-2011, 06:23 AM

Yeah i decided to write. I have to take a break soon because my show "Falling Skies" is coming on soon, but i just wrote a really funny scene so I feel today was a success

Arianna Sterling · 07-18-2011, 06:40 AM

I wrote a good 1300 words already today, buuuuut I feel like I could totally do more. So I'm going to do more

NoGuessing · 07-18-2011, 06:54 AM

I've always wondered what would happen if (Minor spoilers about crown debt in white) Tywin Lannister demanded repayment on his loans. Not that he would in the current book 1 situation, but in an alternative universe.

Aren't they getting loans from a few overseas banks as well? I haven't read A Feast for Crows in ages, and I think that was the book where Littlefinger mentioned them briefly.

NoGuessing · 07-18-2011, 06:55 AM

Hello persons of TWIFT.

Yes, I know I'm posting my two posts back to front.

My Kindle arrived today. I should have bought this thing ages ago.

Kyrie · 07-18-2011, 07:00 AM

Hello, person of Nog.

NoGuessing · 07-18-2011, 07:02 AM

Hey Kyrie, how goes it?

amlptj · 07-18-2011, 07:03 AM

wow falling skies is so awesome, has anyone else watched this?

Kyrie · 07-18-2011, 07:03 AM

All right. I'm dead tired from tying water balloons / being sociable with relatives all day.

How're you?

NoGuessing · 07-18-2011, 07:05 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Kyrie

All right. I'm dead tired from tying water balloons / being sociable with relatives all day.

How're you?

Sounds fun. Did you win the water fight?

I'm good. Just got back from my first classes of this semester.

07-18-2011, 03:19 AM	#5426
lisalulu09 Potterhead Gleek Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Hogwarts Posts: 14,631	Ha. I know I want to have a dream sequence in this chapter, but I'm not sure about when, in terms of which of the existing scene ideas come before and after it and what should happen in. 'Love Story' by Taylor Swift inspired a dream sequence a few chapters back, but this may be to do with the fact that it also fitted something else that happened in that scene and I had it on repeat. __________________ Stupid Cupid - YA Romantic Comedy - Revising Ollie - MG Retelling of Oliver Twist - On hold Rome Forever After - YA Contemporary Romance - Writing the first draft (14.5K/24K) Reading: "Oliver Twist" - Charles Dickens "American Gods" - Neil Gaiman Facebook Blog Twitter

07-18-2011, 03:21 AM	#5427
Arianna Sterling My Protagonists Hate Me Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: Cirque des Tenebres Posts: 6,998	I promise the ones in Weeping I'll be nice to them for a scene, since their lives suck so much XD __________________ Seahome (fantasy) Drafting Lifelike (fantasy) Awaiting revisions Wishmaster (fantasy) Awaiting revisions and a more fitting title Weeping (dark fantasy) Revisions on hold

07-18-2011, 03:22 AM	#5428
lisalulu09 Potterhead Gleek Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Hogwarts Posts: 14,631	Unfortunatly, there is going to be a sucky scene in this chapter. __________________ Stupid Cupid - YA Romantic Comedy - Revising Ollie - MG Retelling of Oliver Twist - On hold Rome Forever After - YA Contemporary Romance - Writing the first draft (14.5K/24K) Reading: "Oliver Twist" - Charles Dickens "American Gods" - Neil Gaiman Facebook Blog Twitter

07-18-2011, 03:38 AM	#5430
lisalulu09 Potterhead Gleek Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Hogwarts Posts: 14,631	I'd want to read the book. It's a very good query in my opinion, but I'd advise you to put it up in QLH for constructive comments. __________________ Stupid Cupid - YA Romantic Comedy - Revising Ollie - MG Retelling of Oliver Twist - On hold Rome Forever After - YA Contemporary Romance - Writing the first draft (14.5K/24K) Reading: "Oliver Twist" - Charles Dickens "American Gods" - Neil Gaiman Facebook Blog Twitter

07-18-2011, 03:40 AM	#5431
Arianna Sterling My Protagonists Hate Me Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: Cirque des Tenebres Posts: 6,998	I did, and one person called it uninteresting. No one else said that though, and I've shown it to a number of people, so I'm just looking for more opinions Especially since I really freaking like that paragraph. I'm editing other parts of the query though. __________________ Seahome (fantasy) Drafting Lifelike (fantasy) Awaiting revisions Wishmaster (fantasy) Awaiting revisions and a more fitting title Weeping (dark fantasy) Revisions on hold

07-18-2011, 03:52 AM	#5432
Imbroglio IMBROGLIO Join Date: May 2009 Posts: 3,716	My life is, once again, a spiraling black abyss. How's everyone else? Lol. __________________ UNTITLED - Chapter 8 [10k] CURRENTLY READING: Furies of Calderon \|Elantris

07-18-2011, 03:54 AM	#5433
lisalulu09 Potterhead Gleek Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Hogwarts Posts: 14,631	Tired. Listening to the playlist for Suns and Stars. Trying to come up with at least one more note for Chapter Eleven. My character is not cooperating. D: ETA: Yay, I now have enough notes. Now to go to bed. __________________ Stupid Cupid - YA Romantic Comedy - Revising Ollie - MG Retelling of Oliver Twist - On hold Rome Forever After - YA Contemporary Romance - Writing the first draft (14.5K/24K) Reading: "Oliver Twist" - Charles Dickens "American Gods" - Neil Gaiman Facebook Blog Twitter Last edited by lisalulu09; 07-18-2011 at 04:00 AM.

07-18-2011, 04:10 AM	#5434
Arianna Sterling My Protagonists Hate Me Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: Cirque des Tenebres Posts: 6,998	G'night Lisa. Hi Glo. __________________ Seahome (fantasy) Drafting Lifelike (fantasy) Awaiting revisions Wishmaster (fantasy) Awaiting revisions and a more fitting title Weeping (dark fantasy) Revisions on hold

07-18-2011, 04:48 AM	#5435
parumpdragon fire breather Join Date: Mar 2011 Location: Arizona Posts: 25,917	Oooh, you are getting close to 5k in post, congrats! __________________ Free to Download Now: https://www.smashwords.com/books/view/301172 Goodreads: http://www.goodreads.com/book/show/1...hadow-s-rising Twitter: https://twitter.com/NicolShadowbled Website: https://sites.google.com/site/shadowbled/

07-18-2011, 05:10 AM	#5436
Zoombie Hwee kaptoored eet for kayhosssssss Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: The Eye of Terror Posts: 36,701	I'm listening to the Game of Thrones and...well, the king is showing up at Main McCharacter Stark's place and he's all like, "Yo yo yo, bro, I'm bringing 100 knights with me!" Fun fact: In France, sometime around the 13th century, an influential noblewoman was hacked to pieces by her enemies. Why? WEll, she had this nasty habit of trying to gain power, and one of the ways she did it was to bring...you guessed it...a 100 knights to various places she wanted to BEGGAR. Do you know how much it COSTS to feed that many knights and their horses!? __________________ Shattered Sky: Draft 6, done! Worldshard: 85,000/85,000 (Draft 1: DONE!) River⁷: 25,000/??,000 words Read my blog: Quantum Spin Plates Tweets from the Future: Follow my characters. BUY MY BOOK HERE!

07-18-2011, 05:11 AM	#5437
amlptj Speling & grammer murderer, Sorrie! Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Philadelphia PA Posts: 10,272	Hello all! Hows your day going... I've had a very long day, had to get up early (well early for me) then I spent like 5 hours out shopping for stuff with my mom to come home and trim my garden hedge, pull up all the weeds and then come inside and rewire my kitchen light switch, then make dinner.... Oh i'm exhausted but for some reason cant sleep __________________ Legend of the Freaks YA Horror/Thriller Series 8 of 12 books complete WiP Re-write of first book FREAKs Unsung Zeros Psychological Thriller Rewrite -1/2 done On Hold The Amnesia Journey YA Fantasy RBSL Contemp/romantic comedy Legend of a Freak (Blog!)

07-18-2011, 05:19 AM	#5438
Parametric useless idiot Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Bristol, England Posts: 9,141	Martin does know how much it costs. The realm is staggeringly in debt and staring at bankruptcy, and it only gets worse as wars devastate harvests and winter sets in.

07-18-2011, 05:21 AM	#5439
Zoombie Hwee kaptoored eet for kayhosssssss Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: The Eye of Terror Posts: 36,701	Oh, I'm sure. I was just enjoying the historical parallels! Heck, Stark and Starkwife went, "Augh, King, WHY YOU DO THIS!? SO MUCH COST!" __________________ Shattered Sky: Draft 6, done! Worldshard: 85,000/85,000 (Draft 1: DONE!) River⁷: 25,000/??,000 words Read my blog: Quantum Spin Plates Tweets from the Future: Follow my characters. BUY MY BOOK HERE!

07-18-2011, 05:49 AM	#5440
amlptj Speling & grammer murderer, Sorrie! Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Philadelphia PA Posts: 10,272	So what's new with everyone? __________________ Legend of the Freaks YA Horror/Thriller Series 8 of 12 books complete WiP Re-write of first book FREAKs Unsung Zeros Psychological Thriller Rewrite -1/2 done On Hold The Amnesia Journey YA Fantasy RBSL Contemp/romantic comedy Legend of a Freak (Blog!)

07-18-2011, 06:18 AM	#5441
Arianna Sterling My Protagonists Hate Me Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: Cirque des Tenebres Posts: 6,998	Well, I vanished to the store for awhile, bought some new headphones. Maybe I should try to do a bit of writing now. __________________ Seahome (fantasy) Drafting Lifelike (fantasy) Awaiting revisions Wishmaster (fantasy) Awaiting revisions and a more fitting title Weeping (dark fantasy) Revisions on hold

07-18-2011, 06:23 AM	#5442
amlptj Speling & grammer murderer, Sorrie! Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Philadelphia PA Posts: 10,272	Yeah i decided to write. I have to take a break soon because my show "Falling Skies" is coming on soon, but i just wrote a really funny scene so I feel today was a success __________________ Legend of the Freaks YA Horror/Thriller Series 8 of 12 books complete WiP Re-write of first book FREAKs Unsung Zeros Psychological Thriller Rewrite -1/2 done On Hold The Amnesia Journey YA Fantasy RBSL Contemp/romantic comedy Legend of a Freak (Blog!)

07-18-2011, 06:40 AM	#5443
Arianna Sterling My Protagonists Hate Me Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: Cirque des Tenebres Posts: 6,998	I wrote a good 1300 words already today, buuuuut I feel like I could totally do more. So I'm going to do more __________________ Seahome (fantasy) Drafting Lifelike (fantasy) Awaiting revisions Wishmaster (fantasy) Awaiting revisions and a more fitting title Weeping (dark fantasy) Revisions on hold

07-18-2011, 06:54 AM	#5444
NoGuessing Buzz Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: The Land of the Long White Cloud Posts: 2,306	I've always wondered what would happen if (Minor spoilers about crown debt in white) Tywin Lannister demanded repayment on his loans. Not that he would in the current book 1 situation, but in an alternative universe. Aren't they getting loans from a few overseas banks as well? I haven't read A Feast for Crows in ages, and I think that was the book where Littlefinger mentioned them briefly. __________________ WIP River Kings Mae's Story (Title to change, but is better than untitled with glaciers) "First lesson, stick em with the pointy end." My blog: http://noguessing.blogspot.com/ Last edited by NoGuessing; 07-18-2011 at 06:58 AM.

07-18-2011, 06:55 AM	#5445
NoGuessing Buzz Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: The Land of the Long White Cloud Posts: 2,306	Hello persons of TWIFT. Yes, I know I'm posting my two posts back to front. My Kindle arrived today. I should have bought this thing ages ago. __________________ WIP River Kings Mae's Story (Title to change, but is better than untitled with glaciers) "First lesson, stick em with the pointy end." My blog: http://noguessing.blogspot.com/

07-18-2011, 07:00 AM	#5446
Kyrie Queen of Adverbs (unfortunately) Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: Victorian London Posts: 9,213	Hello, person of Nog. __________________ Letters to Oliver: querying. Sent: 43 Rejections: 26 Fulls: 4 Partials: 1 A Terror of Darkness: v. 4.0 - 67k - waiting for beta comments And then I met a man called the Doctor. A man who could change his face. And he took me away from home in his magical machine. He showed me the whole of time and space. I thought it would never end. BLOGGER! YOUTUBE!

07-18-2011, 07:02 AM	#5447
NoGuessing Buzz Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: The Land of the Long White Cloud Posts: 2,306	Hey Kyrie, how goes it? __________________ WIP River Kings Mae's Story (Title to change, but is better than untitled with glaciers) "First lesson, stick em with the pointy end." My blog: http://noguessing.blogspot.com/

07-18-2011, 07:03 AM	#5448
amlptj Speling & grammer murderer, Sorrie! Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Philadelphia PA Posts: 10,272	wow falling skies is so awesome, has anyone else watched this? __________________ Legend of the Freaks YA Horror/Thriller Series 8 of 12 books complete WiP Re-write of first book FREAKs Unsung Zeros Psychological Thriller Rewrite -1/2 done On Hold The Amnesia Journey YA Fantasy RBSL Contemp/romantic comedy Legend of a Freak (Blog!)

07-18-2011, 07:03 AM	#5449
Kyrie Queen of Adverbs (unfortunately) Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: Victorian London Posts: 9,213	All right. I'm dead tired from tying water balloons / being sociable with relatives all day. How're you? __________________ Letters to Oliver: querying. Sent: 43 Rejections: 26 Fulls: 4 Partials: 1 A Terror of Darkness: v. 4.0 - 67k - waiting for beta comments And then I met a man called the Doctor. A man who could change his face. And he took me away from home in his magical machine. He showed me the whole of time and space. I thought it would never end. BLOGGER! YOUTUBE!

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