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Old 07-18-2011, 03:19 AM   #5426
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Ha. I know I want to have a dream sequence in this chapter, but I'm not sure about when, in terms of which of the existing scene ideas come before and after it and what should happen in.

'Love Story' by Taylor Swift inspired a dream sequence a few chapters back, but this may be to do with the fact that it also fitted something else that happened in that scene and I had it on repeat.
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I promise the ones in Weeping I'll be nice to them for a scene, since their lives suck so much XD
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Unfortunatly, there is going to be a sucky scene in this chapter.
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Awwww

Okay, question. Does this sound interesting?

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Despite the insanity of the subculture—otaku in America pride themselves on being a fun-loving, open and wacky group—there aren't really any books on the market that express what the culture is all about in a way that is both informative and entertaining. CULTURE, CONVENTIONS AND COSPLAY will fill in this gap. Rather than being in encyclopedia or essay format as a majority of books on the topic are at the moment, this book goes chapter by chapter to explain everything from what the heck a yandere is to how to properly take care of your cosplay gear in a typical fan voice. It will also include interviews from industry professionals, well-known cosplayers and a variety of other specialists (i.e. lolita, cosplay photography, artists). It is geared to appeal to the otaku community, as well as their family and friends who want to understand why their loved ones are putting on bright green wigs and vibrant stockings, and then vanishing for three days to a convention.
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I'd want to read the book. It's a very good query in my opinion, but I'd advise you to put it up in QLH for constructive comments.
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I did, and one person called it uninteresting. No one else said that though, and I've shown it to a number of people, so I'm just looking for more opinions Especially since I really freaking like that paragraph. I'm editing other parts of the query though.
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Old 07-18-2011, 03:54 AM   #5433
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Tired. Listening to the playlist for Suns and Stars. Trying to come up with at least one more note for Chapter Eleven. My character is not cooperating. D:

ETA: Yay, I now have enough notes. Now to go to bed.
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Old 07-18-2011, 04:10 AM   #5434
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G'night Lisa.

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Oooh, you are getting close to 5k in post, congrats!
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I'm listening to the Game of Thrones and...well, the king is showing up at Main McCharacter Stark's place and he's all like, "Yo yo yo, bro, I'm bringing 100 knights with me!"

Fun fact: In France, sometime around the 13th century, an influential noblewoman was hacked to pieces by her enemies. Why? WEll, she had this nasty habit of trying to gain power, and one of the ways she did it was to bring...you guessed it...a 100 knights to various places she wanted to BEGGAR.

Do you know how much it COSTS to feed that many knights and their horses!?
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Hello all! Hows your day going... I've had a very long day, had to get up early (well early for me) then I spent like 5 hours out shopping for stuff with my mom to come home and trim my garden hedge, pull up all the weeds and then come inside and rewire my kitchen light switch, then make dinner.... Oh i'm exhausted but for some reason cant sleep
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Martin does know how much it costs. The realm is staggeringly in debt and staring at bankruptcy, and it only gets worse as wars devastate harvests and winter sets in.
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Oh, I'm sure. I was just enjoying the historical parallels!

Heck, Stark and Starkwife went, "Augh, King, WHY YOU DO THIS!? SO MUCH COST!"
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Well, I vanished to the store for awhile, bought some new headphones.

Maybe I should try to do a bit of writing now.
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Yeah i decided to write. I have to take a break soon because my show "Falling Skies" is coming on soon, but i just wrote a really funny scene so I feel today was a success
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I wrote a good 1300 words already today, buuuuut I feel like I could totally do more. So I'm going to do more
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I've always wondered what would happen if (Minor spoilers about crown debt in white) Tywin Lannister demanded repayment on his loans. Not that he would in the current book 1 situation, but in an alternative universe.

Aren't they getting loans from a few overseas banks as well? I haven't read A Feast for Crows in ages, and I think that was the book where Littlefinger mentioned them briefly.

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Sounds fun. Did you win the water fight?

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