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Old 03-05-2012, 08:46 PM   #27176
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My BIG BAD is...

...a fifteen-year-old girl.
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I'm not sure about my original beginning. I like it, but I don't know if it's hooky enough.

I'm keeping the party. It's the rest of it I'm not sure about.
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I need to decide what POV I'm writing in...

I know 3rd person, but whether I'm alternate chapters or just writing omniscient...

I need Sophie's POV, but I need Veronika's for some scenes.
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POV is a pain. I kept alternating in close third between Matthew and Carla, but I don't feel... it works.
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I feel like blabbering about my BIG BAD but that would ruin the ending of my first book for the 2 people here that are reading it.

You guys really have no idea how excited and proud I am that i figured out this epic ending of my series. Almost every book has some form of a OMG mind screw twist. But this ending gives the whole series and earthshattering OOOOOMMMMMMGGGGG mind screw squared twist!!!!!
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I don't know how old my BIG BAD is... Young, but older than the MC's, making him probably somewhere in his twenties, or maybe he could be eighteen... Or nineteen...
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Old 03-05-2012, 08:59 PM   #27182
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I LOVE that moment.

I'm still working on the synopsis outline for Sherlockettes, but I can't work on it again until late tonight or tomorrow.
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Old 03-05-2012, 09:04 PM   #27183
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Why not, Tally. Hairspray stuff?

I'm keeping this scene. I'm changing the one after it?

I actually don't know the difference between close third and omnicent third that well. I've never written it.
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My MC's are 23 in the last two books in the series. Making it a full decade from the beginning to end of the series. With all the challenges they went through they grew up alot, and there abilities transformed and changed making them the people they are when there whole world is ripped and shattered right in front of them. They end up so used to winning against evil forces that be, used to being indestructible that they completely forget what its like to be on the loosing end. To not win in the end.

I'm so evil to my characters!!!!
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Mathew and Carla are both eighteen in the first book.
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Jamie and Andrew are eighteen. The six books last from August to July the next year, so they're eighteen throughout the whole series. Jamie dies before his nineteenth birthday.
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Old 03-05-2012, 09:26 PM   #27187
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I'm not sure how long the series is.

Could someone explain the different types of third person POV, and how they work, please?
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Awwwwww that's sad!!!!! I killed off one true MC and could literally never do it again. You would think a real person died how utterly depressed I was after I had to kill him off.

Yeah i dont really follow the YA age rules. First book there 13/14 Last two books there 23/24. But the majority of the series (second- seventh) they are YA range
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He's the major character of the two, and I figured that's the best way to end the series. I could keep going on and on and on if I didn't.
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Yeah, Hairspray stuff.
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I figured out the POV thing!!

ETA: I just crossed out an ENTIRE SCENE.
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Out of class. I feel like i want to bang my head against the wall till it bleeds.

So what's new with everyone else?
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SCRIBBLING.

There is a lot of crossing out at the moment.
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Cool, i'm fixing up my dialogue tags for chapter 15 of FREAKS. Then in class i'm going to try for the life of me to figure out what the hell to do with Unsung zero's ending. How i hate bullshit classes that are completely irrelevant to life.
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I have decided that I'm going to mention the POV on the cards using highlighters.
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I'm going to have to draw a really large diagram to figure out what UZ's ending should be. I just cant figure out how everything is going to connect and how everyone is either going to end up dead or ruined without my MC's have to get there hands dirtier then I intended.

On another notes I might have to change my title because i found out Unsung Zeros is the name of a small rock band. I'm so pissed off now.
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I changed my mind about the highlighters.

I'm going to need to add all the romance scenes into the outline...
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3 hours until my episode of Sherlock downloads on iTunes....

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